Susan Ashley Poet Free verse

Grief

I beseech the shards of my shattered self,
as recollections collect with a jagged edge,
for a softened reflection of a dream in smithereens
to sheath this sunken cheeked shadow
lost in the mirrored fragments 
of hollow-eyed tears.


Susan Ashley
February 12, 2019


~ Sixth Place ~
Premiere Contest: May 2019 Premier 4  (Max 14 Lines)
Sponsor: Brian Strand


~ Fifth Place ~
Contest: Capture That Emotion
Sponsor: Nina Parmenter

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Kurt Ravidas July 29, 2019 at 7:01 PM Wow, the alliterations crunch like broken glass under feet! Bravo, Susan. Susan Ashley July 29, 2019 at 10:02 PM Oh, I can hear it! I never noticed it before until I read your illuminating comments. Now it is me that has the luxury to bask in the light of your glowing words, Kurt. Your wonderful and perception thoughts are a thrill to receive. Thank you my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

L. J. Carber May 15, 2019 at 7:43 AM Congrats Susan-- that 1st line is especially powerful! Susan Ashley May 15, 2019 at 7:54 PM L.J., I relish your wonderful visit and heartwarming congrats. Thank you and warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 13, 2019 at 12:41 PM Back with congratulations Lovely! Hugs n' love! xomo Susan Ashley May 13, 2019 at 10:22 PM I relish your return visit and heartwarming congrats, Mo. Thank you my lovely! Warmest wishes and hugs to you always.. ~Susan <3

P.S. Awtry May 13, 2019 at 10:34 AM Congratulations Susan on your placement in Brian's contest with this heart-rending write! (love all the sounds you wove together in this!) Susan Ashley May 13, 2019 at 10:19 PM Your wonderful visit is heartwarming, P.S. It’s always so nice to see you here. Thank you for your uplifting comments and kind congrats, my lovely friend. You are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf May 13, 2019 at 9:44 AM Back with congrats again on your placement in Brian's contest. As predicted, you keep 'kicking poetry derriere,' my friend. LOL. Write on, Susan! Best wishes always, Gershon Susan Ashley May 13, 2019 at 10:26 PM As predicted, your heartwarming comments keep bringing bouquets of smiles, Gershon :)) You have quite the talent for that! Your return visit and heartwarming congrats are deeply appreciated, as is your wonderful friendship. Warmest wishes always, my dear friend.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier May 13, 2019 at 8:54 AM Congrats on your win, Susan. Well penned. Susan Ashley May 13, 2019 at 10:20 PM Thank you for your wonderful comments, Line, and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robertina B. March 13, 2019 at 1:44 PM Congratulations on your win, my dear friend.. So wonderfully expressed.. A shiny gem!! As always your talent glistens .. A fave for me! Many blessings to you! Susan Ashley April 5, 2019 at 5:56 PM Thank you for your truly valued comments, your fav and kind congrats, dear Robertina. My apologies for my late reply (the whole family had the flu in March - one after the other..). Your gracious visit and wonderful friendship is most appreciated. Warmest wishes and blessings always.. ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong March 13, 2019 at 9:57 AM Excellent Susan! Congrats on your win! xxoo : ) Susan Ashley April 5, 2019 at 5:54 PM Thank you for your truly valued comments and kind congrats, dear Connie. My apologies for my late reply. Your gracious visit and wonderful friendship is most appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Bernard Chan February 23, 2019 at 3:30 PM Awesome lines! The shards of shattered self, recollections with a jagged edge, sunken cheeked shadow and hollow-eyed tears . . . You've captured grief to haunting effect, Susan. Loved it. Susan Ashley February 28, 2019 at 8:28 PM I'm thrilled to receive this wonderful praise from a talented poet, such as yourself, Bernard. Your precious comments are uplifting and truly appreciated and I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus February 16, 2019 at 8:02 AM Excellent...beautifully expressed, Susan! Each line and each word are meant to convey the pain of an aching heart. The letter 's' runs like a sharp blade throughout your poem, denoting the slashed effects of grief. Congratulations on this fine win. ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul Susan Ashley February 18, 2019 at 12:32 PM Paul, my dear friend, I'm so delighted by your wonderful presence and your beautiful comments. Both are a pleasure to receive as well as your kind congrats. Thank you for your inspiring and enthralling critique. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley February 14, 2019 at 7:51 AM As always dear friend your verses are exceptional... A fav... Susan Ashley February 14, 2019 at 6:31 PM Thank you for your wonderful comments and your fav, my dear friend. Your gracious presence and kindness are deeply appreciated, Robert. Warmest wishes always my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf February 13, 2019 at 10:06 PM Ah, first time I've come across a 'dream in smithereens,' my poetic friend. It may be the last time too, as I imagine that you are going to pick up the 'shards of your shattered self' and kick some more poetry derriere again!! Congrats on your placement in the contest, Susan, and warmest winter wishes. ~ Gershon Susan Ashley February 14, 2019 at 6:42 PM You bring bouquets of smiles whenever your gracious presence makes the scene on my poetry page, Gershon. Thank you for your wonderful comments, I relish your thoughts always, and for your kind congrats. Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan

Beata Agustin February 13, 2019 at 9:15 PM So well-expressed! Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you. Susan Ashley February 14, 2019 at 6:28 PM Thank you for your lovely visit, Beata. Your heartwarming comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich February 13, 2019 at 7:56 PM this is fantastic writing. Such great use of sound!! Big congrats on your well deserved win. Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 8:01 PM Your esteemed comments fill me with delight, Andrea. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and for your kind congrats. Warmest wishes always, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser February 13, 2019 at 4:38 PM Oh so excellent, Susan! You hit it out of the ballpark with this gem! Congrats on your win! :) Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 7:58 PM Thank you for your uplifting comments, Laura, and for your kind congrats. Both are truly appreciated, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier February 13, 2019 at 4:02 PM Congrats on your win, Susan. Well done. Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 7:54 PM Thank you, Line, for your return visit and kind congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Jan Allison February 13, 2019 at 3:58 PM such a poignant piece Susan, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 7:53 PM Thank you, Jan, for your gracious visit and wonderful comments, both are truly appreciated, as are your congrats as well. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrew Fairchild February 13, 2019 at 12:11 PM 'as recollections collect with a jagged edge'. Cuts deep, grief does. Gut-wrenching power in this one. Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 7:53 PM Thank you, Andrew, for your touching comments. I appreciate both your kind visit and your wonderful sentiments. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

CayCay Godwin February 13, 2019 at 11:59 AM I say yes, yes, yes! Very well written, great word choices, Susan. Hey - I watched the Patriots take it and thought of you during the Super Bowl. New England must be happy, everyone, collectively happy (let's pretend.) Again, an awesome write. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 7:49 PM Your visit is a delight, CayCay, as are your precious comments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem, and yes, I was so pleased that the Patriots won the Super Bowl, as was everyone else in my family, so it was very much a collective happiness around here in my small neck of the woods :)) Thank you for your uplifting words, my lovely friend. I hope all is well.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael February 13, 2019 at 7:56 AM Hollow-eyed tears worn away by stabbing pain....A lot of grief here...Well done Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 6:33 PM Indeed, dramatic grief! Thank you, Arturo, for your lovely visit and kind sentiments. Your comments are a pleasure to receive. I hope all is well with you, mon ami. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Lawrence Sharp February 12, 2019 at 10:26 PM Brief, poetic, beautifully written; excellent poem, Susan, fave, Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 6:29 PM Thank you, Lawrence, for your gracious visit and uplifting comments. Both are truly appreciated, as well as the added bonus of your fave. Warmest wishes always my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Charles Messina February 12, 2019 at 9:12 PM It doesn't take you many words to make a beautiful poem, Susan. Grief is something we are all born with, only the strong overcome it. Good grief (lol) Warmest wishes my dear friend. ~Charlie Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 6:25 PM Hello my charming friend, I delight in your wonderful visit and appreciate your inspiring comments. Thank you, dear Charlieku, for your heartwarming kindness. Warmest wishes always my dear friend.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier February 12, 2019 at 7:54 PM Wow - poignant poem, Susan. Susan Ashley February 13, 2019 at 6:22 PM Thank you, Line, for your wonderful comments and kind visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Tom Cunningham February 12, 2019 at 3:56 PM Grief so well described in.your verse Susan. Good luck. Tom Susan Ashley February 12, 2019 at 7:18 PM Thank you, Tom, for your gracious visit and wonderful comments, both are truly appreciated, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Nette Onclaud February 12, 2019 at 2:31 PM ohh, such a beautifully grating work... grief is sometimes untenable, susan...huggs Susan Ashley February 12, 2019 at 7:22 PM Nette, your heartwarming comments are welcomed on this cold and snowy afternoon. Thank you for your gracious visit and for your kindness. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

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