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Greedy Guts

cream cake meant for mom
just disappeared from the fridge ...
son wipes crumbs from mouth

Senryu about Greed, Lust or Loss. Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Tania Kitchin

5,7,5 checked with how many syllables

7/7/19

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Paul Callus

July 17, 2019 at 11:34 AM

Ha ha....with one son it is not hard to find the culprit; was harder in my case where 7 siblings were involved lol. Congratulations on placing first. Hugs // paul

Probir Gupta

July 16, 2019 at 10:20 PM

A nice senryu that brings out a spontaneous grin ... Lovely expression of emotions, Jan ... Congratulations ....

Andrea Dietrich

July 16, 2019 at 6:02 PM

cute one, Jan, Greed in the most normal way, from a kid! congrats too

Tom Cunningham

July 16, 2019 at 8:32 AM

Missed this one Jan, reminds me of when I was young. Congratulations. Tom

Georgia Kereopa

July 16, 2019 at 2:09 AM

Congratulations jan.

Jeanne Mcgee

July 16, 2019 at 12:10 AM

Poor mom...time to have someone help bake more! Lovely wirte. Congrats on your win

Alexis Y.

July 15, 2019 at 7:21 PM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your top win:-) Alexis

Kim Rodrigues

July 15, 2019 at 7:14 PM

Congratulations on top win!

Tania Kitchin

July 15, 2019 at 6:41 PM

Congratulations Jan on your first place win with your fun senryu, he was caught red handed!

Jan Allison

July 15, 2019 at 6:59 PM

Thankfully its pure fiction for me Tania my son was never one to raid the fridge:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

July 8, 2019 at 4:47 PM

Yep, that would be me when I was a boy.

Jan Allison

July 12, 2019 at 7:10 AM

Love your honesty Rick!:-) hugs jan xx

Gershon Wolf

July 8, 2019 at 4:32 PM

Talk about a senryu that everyone can relate to! You've nailed that, Jan! :) gw

Jan Allison

July 12, 2019 at 7:10 AM

I was so lucky my son never raided the fridge!:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Adams

July 7, 2019 at 7:45 PM

I love it! I couldn’t tell you how many times desserts vanished in the middle of the night that were meant for guests! Good luck in the contest:)

Jan Allison

July 8, 2019 at 11:08 AM

Oh gosh Sandra that must have been infuriating!!!:-( hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

July 7, 2019 at 6:07 PM

ha! sounds about right! good luck in the contest, jan...

Jan Allison

July 8, 2019 at 11:08 AM

thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Arturo Michael

July 7, 2019 at 3:27 PM

Nice one...but what do you expect...to have him watch that sweetness and walk away...

Jan Allison

July 8, 2019 at 11:07 AM

lol thanks Arturo:-) hugs Jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos

July 7, 2019 at 2:04 PM

Hi Jan, This is so true of most children - I love to watch the British programme with the nursery school age children as they play off with their parents - who will be right about character, habits, dress code, friends etc, the parents or the children - this write reminds me of the programme. Hugs and blessings. Clever for a contest, best wishes. Jennifer.

Jan Allison

July 8, 2019 at 11:07 AM

I'm not aware of the programme jennifer what is it called!:-) hugs jan xx