Greed Wins

Greed Wins


                       Fate fetched them crushed in a crash, faint in hopes  
                                broken limbs, sober spirit, side by side
                                One by the window, the other beside .
                              They lay in room pale blue, chlorine chores.
                       Months together, movements knelled, they lay forth,
                        new found friends , out ‘a window small, one pried, 
                      Mouthed beauties there, to keep his pal’s smile bright
                             Other but heard, prayed, at this fortune swore,

                                His pal be slain, he be blessed with sights 
                          outside. Lo! Next dark day snatched the good soul
                            The lone peer blessed. Soon, he sent his eyes
                             Outdoors, on an old bleak wall, nothing more
                                Drained in spirit he cursed his greed wry 
                                   “Beautifully lied ...he kept me alive”


Italian Sonnet, pentameter,rhyme scheme  abbaabba  cdcd bb

Mehnaz Veetil

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 2/10/2013 10:08:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/8/2013 5:31:00 PM
hey congratulations with this one, my friend. I like how you employed enjambment in that one part. Not many do that!!
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Date: 2/5/2013 12:04:00 PM
congrats on a great win Mehnaz
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Date: 2/5/2013 5:50:00 AM
Congratulations Mehnaz well deserved win once more xx
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Date: 2/4/2013 10:03:00 PM
Hello Mehnaz, a very beautiful winning poem~ LINDA
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Date: 2/4/2013 6:30:00 PM
Well done, congrats!
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Date: 2/4/2013 1:11:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 1/8/2013 8:54:00 PM
Mehnaz, your poem is deep and express reality... enjoyed...pd58dk
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Date: 1/4/2013 2:55:00 PM
tell a lie to ease the pain , summer warm not winters rain, good one mate....
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Date: 1/2/2013 8:11:00 AM
This is such a powerful poem. Your writing style is beautiful.
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Date: 12/30/2012 11:26:00 PM
Wow! Beautifully done Mehnaz! The seduction of greed can indeed render mankind blind.
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Mehnaz Veetil
Date: 1/1/2013 10:57:00 PM
Thank you Vicky.
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