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Gravity Brevity If brevity matters, dreams race swift than nightmares to catchup, No muck and mire, no festering around, nothing to patch up, A soloist than an orchestra, focus on one than all, Critiques take a high note to second guess, a rise from a fall, To explode in verse, implode to a terse form, worst or better, A full platter, gluttonous matter, honey from hive, sweeter. 2019 September 29 *1st Place* Brevity Poetry Contest No More Than Six Lines ~~Caren Krutsinger

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Brenda Chiri

Date: 2/6/2020 4:04:00 PM

Congrats on your win!;)

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/6/2020 4:22:00 PM

Thanks Brenda!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/4/2019 6:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Blessings

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/4/2019 8:22:00 AM

Amen to that ~ Aloha always William

Constance La France

Date: 10/3/2019 5:01:00 PM

William congratulations on your win in the contest with this interesting poem !

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/3/2019 5:52:00 PM

Thanks for sharing Constance! ~ Aloha always William

David Drowley

Date: 10/3/2019 3:46:00 PM

'William, Congratulations on your first place win! David'

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/3/2019 4:24:00 PM

Thank you for your reading and sharing ~ Aloha always William

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/3/2019 12:41:00 PM

CONGRATS on your well-deserved trophy win, William! Janice

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/3/2019 4:23:00 PM

Thanks, for your visit and comment ~ Aloha always William

Brenda Chiri

Date: 10/3/2019 12:12:00 PM

Congrats once again on your win!;)

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/3/2019 1:08:00 PM

My friend, with extended courtesies! ~ Aloha always William

Anisha Dutta

Date: 10/3/2019 11:43:00 AM

WONDERFUL. EXCELLENT RHYTHM. NICEST CHOICE OF WORDS. BIG CONGRATS TO WIN TOP. Blessing

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/3/2019 1:07:00 PM

My appreciative gratitude indeed! ~ Aloha always William

Caycay Jennings

Date: 10/2/2019 8:42:00 PM

What a fun to poem to read aloud for its 'sounds' 'pop' in the mouth to bring one into the poem. A joyous reading experience, William. Good luck in the contest and all else. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/2/2019 9:46:00 PM

I am appreciative to your welcomed comment ~ Aloha always William