Gone Are the Breezes

there's something in the eyes
that hide the truth;
i saw the sun rise today,
a red passion kissing the lake
as reflection's of the day rolled along.

i could feel the stillness of easterly breezes
as my own breath struggled to fall, yellow,
within whispers of my own consciousness;
the trees stood close together,
shadows of tomorrow's promise,
if tomorrow were to come.

i could see beyond the reflection,
the depths of night, as it waited,
patiently on the edge of day,
as if it were a mind.

my own mind twisted its way along,
stillness was something it hated,
but always seemed to find.

i remember, standing, less tall than the trees,
anguished red, but yellow between thoughts,
watching as you drew your last breath,
seeing you rise, like day, then surrender,
like a shadow to night,
knowing, myself, that tomorrow 
would never come again.

i still see this today,
in the lake's reflection,
as i did in yours that day,
and i see it in my own,
it's the horizon of one's mind
that draws the fine line
between past and future,
day and night,
life and death,
yet, there's something in the eyes
that hides the truth, no one cares to see,
yet i see, one last time, all fall still.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Roper Avatar
March 25, 2020 at 11:18 PM
Sandra, beautiful poem a big congratulations on your win in Brian's contest-Stay safe and healthy my friend. Hugs Eve
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March 26, 2020 at 8:56 AM
thank you so much Eve... stay safe... hugs and blessings!
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October 4, 2013 at 6:58 AM
U personified it in bits, delvd into reflections and perception churning out an altogether awesome freeverse!
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:40 AM
thank you so very much for your visit and kind comments :)
Andresen Avatar
October 4, 2013 at 3:54 AM
- Sandra, this is really beautiful ..... touches my heart. - Written with warmth and deep feelings. - Very, very well written! - Have a beautiful weekend! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:41 AM
Thank you Anne-lise, you comments are always so sweet...hugs :)
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October 3, 2013 at 7:17 PM
Sandy, this is a very beautifully penned poem! A very lovely poem indeed, from the title till the very last period, a masterpiece! A very well written poem! Nice job! xoxo hugs and kisses all around for you Sandy girl! :)
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:50 AM
thank you Chris...your comment is so sweet and appreciated...xoxo
Mcdaid Avatar
October 3, 2013 at 4:02 PM
penned really beautiful in so much colour excellent piece
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:52 AM
thank you my sweet friend :) hugs
Dietrich Avatar
October 3, 2013 at 3:33 PM
This is so awesome, Sandy. My oh my, you are a wonder. this is just gorgeous in its imageryl. I hope you are not too busy this week! soupmail.
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:52 AM
thanks for your beautiful uplifting comment on this poem Andrea :) hugs
May Avatar
October 3, 2013 at 8:29 AM
well penned ....I enjoyed it much
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:54 AM
Thank you Joseph, for your visits and kind words! :)
Tacito Avatar
October 3, 2013 at 7:51 AM
Incredible, yet sad. I can understand why. Ah, the inner meaning of "Fall"...wonderful job!
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:54 AM
Thank you so much for your kind comment Drake....hugs :)
Kendrick Avatar
October 3, 2013 at 6:08 AM
It must have been really hard watching a loved one draw their last breath..Great descriptive work of the emotion that you must have experienced..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:55 AM
thank you Sara...it was hard, but knowing she was with loved ones in final moments helped...hugs :)
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October 2, 2013 at 9:52 PM
A wonderful poem so sad yet beautiful, Sandra! It evokes raw emotion...thanks for your encouraging comment today. Love and blessings, Rhonda
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 6:40 AM
thank you so much Rhonda :)
Anglesey Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 7:04 PM
Sandra, this is exquisite. The absence of breezes and stillness that lead to the end of life. A wonderful and sad portrayal.
Adams Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 7:10 PM
thank you, my mother and brother passed in the months of august and September, so this time of year always brings their deaths back...perhaps because everything seems to die off in the fall...
Jordan Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 4:42 PM
Very dense, dark, and strangely beautiful. Fine writing... Jack
Adams Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 7:11 PM
thanks Jack...the fall brings out death in my write, as a few have gone right before it arrived...
Guzzi Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 1:42 PM
A haunting verse! Thanks for stopping by my writing. Light & Love
Adams Avatar
October 2, 2013 at 7:12 PM
thank you Debbie and thank you for stopping by my page :)
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