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Gone Are the Breezes

there's something in the eyes that hide the truth; i saw the sun rise today, a red passion kissing the lake as reflection's of the day rolled along. i could feel the stillness of easterly breezes as my own breath struggled to fall, yellow, within whispers of my own consciousness; the trees stood close together, shadows of tomorrow's promise, if tomorrow were to come. i could see beyond the reflection, the depths of night, as it waited, patiently on the edge of day, as if it were a mind. my own mind twisted its way along, stillness was something it hated, but always seemed to find. i remember, standing, less tall than the trees, anguished red, but yellow between thoughts, watching as you drew your last breath, seeing you rise, like day, then surrender, like a shadow to night, knowing, myself, that tomorrow would never come again. i still see this today, in the lake's reflection, as i did in yours that day, and i see it in my own, it's the horizon of one's mind that draws the fine line between past and future, day and night, life and death, yet, there's something in the eyes that hides the truth, no one cares to see, yet i see, one last time, all fall still.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 3/25/2020 11:18:00 PM
Sandra, beautiful poem a big congratulations on your win in Brian's contest-Stay safe and healthy my friend. Hugs Eve
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/26/2020 8:56:00 AM
thank you so much Eve... stay safe... hugs and blessings!
Date: 10/4/2013 6:58:00 AM
U personified it in bits, delvd into reflections and perception churning out an altogether awesome freeverse!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/8/2013 6:40:00 AM
thank you so very much for your visit and kind comments :)
Date: 10/4/2013 3:54:00 AM
- Sandra, this is really beautiful ..... touches my heart. - Written with warmth and deep feelings. - Very, very well written! - Have a beautiful weekend! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/8/2013 6:41:00 AM
Thank you Anne-lise, you comments are always so sweet...hugs :)
Date: 10/3/2013 7:17:00 PM
Sandy, this is a very beautifully penned poem! A very lovely poem indeed, from the title till the very last period, a masterpiece! A very well written poem! Nice job! xoxo hugs and kisses all around for you Sandy girl! :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/8/2013 6:50:00 AM
thank you Chris...your comment is so sweet and appreciated...xoxo
Date: 10/3/2013 4:02:00 PM
penned really beautiful in so much colour excellent piece
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/8/2013 6:52:00 AM
thank you my sweet friend :) hugs
Date: 10/3/2013 3:33:00 PM
This is so awesome, Sandy. My oh my, you are a wonder. this is just gorgeous in its imageryl. I hope you are not too busy this week! soupmail.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/8/2013 6:52:00 AM
thanks for your beautiful uplifting comment on this poem Andrea :) hugs
Date: 10/3/2013 8:29:00 AM
well penned ....I enjoyed it much
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/8/2013 6:54:00 AM
Thank you Joseph, for your visits and kind words! :)
Date: 10/3/2013 7:51:00 AM
Incredible, yet sad. I can understand why. Ah, the inner meaning of "Fall"...wonderful job!
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Date: 10/8/2013 6:54:00 AM
Thank you so much for your kind comment Drake....hugs :)
Date: 10/3/2013 6:08:00 AM
It must have been really hard watching a loved one draw their last breath..Great descriptive work of the emotion that you must have experienced..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 10/8/2013 6:55:00 AM
thank you Sara...it was hard, but knowing she was with loved ones in final moments helped...hugs :)
Date: 10/2/2013 9:52:00 PM
A wonderful poem so sad yet beautiful, Sandra! It evokes raw emotion...thanks for your encouraging comment today. Love and blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 10/8/2013 6:40:00 AM
thank you so much Rhonda :)
Date: 10/2/2013 7:04:00 PM
Sandra, this is exquisite. The absence of breezes and stillness that lead to the end of life. A wonderful and sad portrayal.
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Date: 10/2/2013 7:10:00 PM
thank you, my mother and brother passed in the months of august and September, so this time of year always brings their deaths back...perhaps because everything seems to die off in the fall...
Date: 10/2/2013 4:42:00 PM
Very dense, dark, and strangely beautiful. Fine writing... Jack
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Date: 10/2/2013 7:11:00 PM
thanks Jack...the fall brings out death in my write, as a few have gone right before it arrived...
Date: 10/2/2013 1:42:00 PM
A haunting verse! Thanks for stopping by my writing. Light & Love
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Date: 10/2/2013 7:12:00 PM
thank you Debbie and thank you for stopping by my page :)

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