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Goldfish stuck inside a bowl, tiny is your space! Simple is that bowl you're in, yet you lend it grace. Goldfish in that tiny bowl with your orange hue, softly shimmer your small fins. It's all you can do! Were I in your circumstance, I would feel bereft, knowing barely could I turn either right or left! March 13, 2020 / Based on Gif #3 (the form is 7/5 Trochee, a rhyming form)

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/25/2020 10:27:00 AM

Hi Andrea, such a wonderful write from your golden pen. I always feel a tinge of sadness when I see a goldfish in such a small bowl. I get the same feeling as I read your excellent words. Another gem, Andrea. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs....Mike. XX

John Watt

Date: 3/23/2020 1:29:00 PM

Thought I commented on this weeks ago, but I really like your 7/5 trochee about the goldfish in its little bowl. My claustrophobia is starting to act up, I better go read your next poem! Hugs/John

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/23/2020 7:06:00 AM

Poor little guy. He has to feel trapped inside that tiny bowl. The Siamese fighting fish doesn't mind small quarters but I think gold fish need more room than that. Your winning poem made me feel so sorry for the little fish Andrea. Your form shines with this write! Congratulations on your win. xxoo

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/17/2020 10:44:00 PM

Very cute and smart, crispy fun write (it's late and I might be getting silly). Oh, I see you won with this Trochee which I don't believe I've ever attempted. Congratulations, my friend!!!! Love, CayCay

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/17/2020 3:11:00 PM

Congratulations on your win my friend. The tightness of the space is what I also noticed.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/15/2020 11:10:00 PM

Back with a big congratulations on your win. Hugs eve

Sonia Walker

Date: 3/15/2020 8:01:00 PM

Andrea, we can't help but feel sorry for your lonely goldfish. Congratulations on your winning poem. ~ Sonia

Rercy Zola-Zaba

Date: 3/15/2020 2:08:00 PM

Nice one Andrea!

Panagiota Romios

Date: 3/15/2020 3:36:00 AM

A perfect poem. Panagiota

Jenish Somadas

Date: 3/14/2020 11:49:00 PM

Sweet rhyme Andrea..Were I in your circumstance.. A show of empathy.. Great lines..

Paul Callus

Date: 3/14/2020 4:02:00 PM

Since you mentioned your fish entry, Andrea, I've been meaning to come read it, and I am not disappointed; I like the form you chose, too. ~ Congratulations on placing first. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/14/2020 8:16:00 PM

thanks for liking my 7/5 trochee form, Paul. I should do another contest about it!

Hilo Poet

Date: 3/14/2020 3:48:00 PM

A rhyming style, Andrea, that you have beautifully crafted to treat our eyes, indeed worthy to be first place, my thanks for your participation, Aloha, William

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/14/2020 8:29:00 PM

thanks so much, William.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 3/14/2020 3:18:00 PM

Andrea, What a predicament in gold. Don't know what size line would be needed to haul that big fish in. Ten pound test, maybe? Looks like the record for eating them is ~300 back in 1974. Have a nice Saturday. -Richard