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Goldfish

Goldfish stuck inside a bowl,
tiny is your space!
Simple is that bowl you're in,
yet you lend it grace.

Goldfish in that tiny bowl
with your orange hue,
softly shimmer your small fins.
It's all you can do!

Were I in your circumstance,
I would feel bereft,
knowing barely could I turn
either right or left!

March 13, 2020 / Based on Gif #3
(the form is 7/5 Trochee, a rhyming form)
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Raven Avatar
March 25, 2020 at 10:27 AM
Hi Andrea, such a wonderful write from your golden pen. I always feel a tinge of sadness when I see a goldfish in such a small bowl. I get the same feeling as I read your excellent words. Another gem, Andrea. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs....Mike. XX
Watt Avatar
March 23, 2020 at 1:29 PM
Thought I commented on this weeks ago, but I really like your 7/5 trochee about the goldfish in its little bowl. My claustrophobia is starting to act up, I better go read your next poem! Hugs/John
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 23, 2020 at 7:06 AM
Poor little guy. He has to feel trapped inside that tiny bowl. The Siamese fighting fish doesn't mind small quarters but I think gold fish need more room than that. Your winning poem made me feel so sorry for the little fish Andrea. Your form shines with this write! Congratulations on your win. xxoo
Godwin Avatar
March 17, 2020 at 10:44 PM
Very cute and smart, crispy fun write (it's late and I might be getting silly). Oh, I see you won with this Trochee which I don't believe I've ever attempted. Congratulations, my friend!!!! Love, CayCay
Krutsinger Avatar
March 17, 2020 at 3:11 PM
Congratulations on your win my friend. The tightness of the space is what I also noticed.
Roper Avatar
March 15, 2020 at 11:10 PM
Back with a big congratulations on your win. Hugs eve
Walker Avatar
March 15, 2020 at 8:01 PM
Andrea, we can't help but feel sorry for your lonely goldfish. Congratulations on your winning poem. ~ Sonia
Zola-Zaba Avatar
March 15, 2020 at 2:08 PM
Nice one Andrea!
Romios Avatar
March 15, 2020 at 3:36 AM
A perfect poem. Panagiota
Somadas Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 11:49 PM
Sweet rhyme Andrea..Were I in your circumstance.. A show of empathy.. Great lines..
Callus Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 4:02 PM
Since you mentioned your fish entry, Andrea, I've been meaning to come read it, and I am not disappointed; I like the form you chose, too. ~ Congratulations on placing first. Regards // paul
Dietrich Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 8:16 PM
thanks for liking my 7/5 trochee form, Paul. I should do another contest about it!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 3:48 PM
A rhyming style, Andrea, that you have beautifully crafted to treat our eyes, indeed worthy to be first place, my thanks for your participation, Aloha, William
Dietrich Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 8:29 PM
thanks so much, William.
Theraven Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 3:18 PM
Andrea, What a predicament in gold. Don't know what size line would be needed to haul that big fish in. Ten pound test, maybe? Looks like the record for eating them is ~300 back in 1974. Have a nice Saturday. -Richard
Bauer Avatar
March 14, 2020 at 2:56 PM
perfect! i love this one, andrea...
Laurie Avatar
March 13, 2020 at 11:15 PM
Hello Andrea ... nicely written and stated Andrea. A goldfish born for prison - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
Roper Avatar
March 13, 2020 at 8:10 PM
love it, Andrea, perfect for the contest
Gauthier Avatar
March 13, 2020 at 6:44 PM
So cute~ love that you used this form and the last stanza is priceless. Well done, Andrea.
Dietrich Avatar
March 13, 2020 at 9:32 PM
thanks, Line. It's my own invented form.
Pandit Avatar
March 13, 2020 at 5:38 PM
I liked the ending lines in each stanza--succinctly descriptive of their predicament. A winning poem you wrote, Andrea.
Cunningham Avatar
March 13, 2020 at 5:09 PM
A fishy tale Andrea lol. Good luck Tom
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