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Goldfish

Goldfish stuck inside a bowl,
tiny is your space!
Simple is that bowl you're in,
yet you lend it grace.

Goldfish in that tiny bowl
with your orange hue,
softly shimmer your small fins.
It's all you can do!

Were I in your circumstance,
I would feel bereft,
knowing barely could I turn
either right or left!

March 13, 2020 / Based on Gif #3
(the form is 7/5 Trochee, a rhyming form)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020


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Date: 3/25/2020 10:27:00 AM
Hi Andrea, such a wonderful write from your golden pen. I always feel a tinge of sadness when I see a goldfish in such a small bowl. I get the same feeling as I read your excellent words. Another gem, Andrea. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 3/23/2020 1:29:00 PM
Thought I commented on this weeks ago, but I really like your 7/5 trochee about the goldfish in its little bowl. My claustrophobia is starting to act up, I better go read your next poem! Hugs/John
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Date: 3/23/2020 7:06:00 AM
Poor little guy. He has to feel trapped inside that tiny bowl. The Siamese fighting fish doesn't mind small quarters but I think gold fish need more room than that. Your winning poem made me feel so sorry for the little fish Andrea. Your form shines with this write! Congratulations on your win. xxoo
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Date: 3/17/2020 10:44:00 PM
Very cute and smart, crispy fun write (it's late and I might be getting silly). Oh, I see you won with this Trochee which I don't believe I've ever attempted. Congratulations, my friend!!!! Love, CayCay
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Date: 3/17/2020 3:11:00 PM
Congratulations on your win my friend. The tightness of the space is what I also noticed.
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Date: 3/15/2020 11:10:00 PM
Back with a big congratulations on your win. Hugs eve
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Date: 3/15/2020 8:01:00 PM
Andrea, we can't help but feel sorry for your lonely goldfish. Congratulations on your winning poem. ~ Sonia
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Date: 3/15/2020 2:08:00 PM
Nice one Andrea!
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Date: 3/15/2020 3:36:00 AM
A perfect poem. Panagiota
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Date: 3/14/2020 11:49:00 PM
Sweet rhyme Andrea..Were I in your circumstance.. A show of empathy.. Great lines..
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Date: 3/14/2020 4:02:00 PM
Since you mentioned your fish entry, Andrea, I've been meaning to come read it, and I am not disappointed; I like the form you chose, too. ~ Congratulations on placing first. Regards // paul
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/14/2020 8:16:00 PM
thanks for liking my 7/5 trochee form, Paul. I should do another contest about it!
Date: 3/14/2020 3:48:00 PM
A rhyming style, Andrea, that you have beautifully crafted to treat our eyes, indeed worthy to be first place, my thanks for your participation, Aloha, William
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/14/2020 8:29:00 PM
thanks so much, William.
Date: 3/14/2020 3:18:00 PM
Andrea, What a predicament in gold. Don't know what size line would be needed to haul that big fish in. Ten pound test, maybe? Looks like the record for eating them is ~300 back in 1974. Have a nice Saturday. -Richard
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Date: 3/14/2020 2:56:00 PM
perfect! i love this one, andrea...
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Date: 3/13/2020 11:15:00 PM
Hello Andrea ... nicely written and stated Andrea. A goldfish born for prison - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 3/13/2020 8:10:00 PM
love it, Andrea, perfect for the contest
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Date: 3/13/2020 6:44:00 PM
So cute~ love that you used this form and the last stanza is priceless. Well done, Andrea.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/13/2020 9:32:00 PM
thanks, Line. It's my own invented form.
Date: 3/13/2020 5:38:00 PM
I liked the ending lines in each stanza--succinctly descriptive of their predicament. A winning poem you wrote, Andrea.
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Date: 3/13/2020 5:09:00 PM
A fishy tale Andrea lol. Good luck Tom
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