Golden Crowns

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unrhymed quatrains

When words fail to express or vocally tell you how a person feels held deeply inside the knotts Those softly mesmerising eyes dawning in the afterlife sweetly startling your music begins to play upon lips Angel silently calling enchanting whispers echo as the heartbeats thump life hypnotic breathless sighs As a pulse races quicksand under the surface unveils you will find me holding forever at night love Daybreaks warmly comforting my precious dream awakens I melt into the clouds were it smiles with a rays Light transmitting signals burn kissing the colours of sunrise where my love for you ruby can neither be measured or bought

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Gary Bateman

Date: 8/20/2016 4:20:00 AM

Most Excellent Liam Mate!! The true feeling of romance pulsates throughout this wonderful write. Keepeth Thy Pen Always Golden!! Cheers and Best, Gary (P.S. I just posted the new co-write too, by the way!!)

The Grahamburglar

Date: 8/19/2016 8:48:00 PM

Very smooth. I enjoyed reading this. I like the absence of punctuation here, which is something I don't usually appreciate, but in this case, it really opens it up and allows the reader to put the pauses where they want, and it can change the meaning. The only thing I would like to point out, is that I think you are missing a 'y' in first word of the 5th stanza. I am sure that should be daybreak. Otherwise, excellent. -G

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/19/2016 3:25:00 PM

- Dear Liam, I enjoy reading this beautiful and romantic poems - The last verse is a jewel - Lovely weekend for you and your loved ones - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 8/19/2016 3:16:00 PM

Hi Liam!:))Wow!Wow!Wow!This is the most very beautiful,romantic,tender,sweet,passionate n' captivating love poem,you've written here my dearest friend Liam.Just dazzling!All so very beautifully written.Just awesome!Another very beautiful,sparkling diamond from your very golden glowing pen.I love it!A most very beautiful, heartfelt,romantic,dreamy,heart melting away enchanting love poem to be held very close to my heart.smiling.This is so very beautiful n' sweet!So wonderful!Just amazing!I truly enjoy it!A true glowing golden gem!Just beautiful!Outstanding poem.Your pen is truly mighty golden!A 7 + + + + +!A Fav!To me you're always the best in everything Liam.So very beautiful,romantic,gentle and sweet.I really hope n' pray alot you're okay in everything, Liam.Please keep positive.Always keeping you in my thoughts n' prayers.Keep your faith!Keep your love hopes n' follow your dreams always too:))Wishing you a very lovely day!In His light God bless you always!:))Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^

Jan Allison

Date: 8/19/2016 3:01:00 PM

such a beautiful gentle write which flows so wonderfully. I always love the imagery in your lovely lines Liam:-) hugs Jan xx