Lin Lane Poet Other

Gold Gilded Petals

Dawn's light awakened sleepy eyes ~ twas of sunflowers in the meadow


greeting their namesake
an ochre field in full bloom ~
petals gold gilded


Brown-eyed cyclops swaying in the breeze
Like turbulent waves in roiling seas
Standing upright on stems of great height
Sunflowers bow their heads at twilight



June 9, 2023
A Monoku, Haiku and 4 Lines of Rhyme
Sponsored by Tania Kitchin

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Andrea Dietrich June 13, 2023 at 12:57 PM Back with my congrats on this gem Lin Lane June 13, 2023 at 1:22 PM Thank ya, Andrea!

Anne-Lise Andresen June 13, 2023 at 2:16 AM - Congratulations on your lovely poem in the contest, by Tania Kitchin - hugs Lin Lane June 13, 2023 at 7:07 AM Hi Anne-Lise and thanks a lot for your congratulations.

Joanna Daniel June 12, 2023 at 10:18 PM Congratulations on your win, Lin:) Lin Lane June 13, 2023 at 7:07 AM Thank you very much, Jo.

Tania Kitchin June 12, 2023 at 3:25 PM Lin, congratulations on your first place win with your gorgeous set of poems! Lin Lane June 13, 2023 at 7:07 AM Thank you ever so much for your remarks and honor, Tania!

Jan Allison June 12, 2023 at 2:35 PM dropping back with many congrats Lin:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane June 13, 2023 at 7:06 AM Thanks for returning, Jan. Hugs for you!

Joanna Daniel June 11, 2023 at 6:54 AM Brilliant:) Lin Lane June 12, 2023 at 2:31 PM Thanks very much, Jo.

Janice Canerdy June 10, 2023 at 5:27 PM Lin, this is a truly excellent piece! Janice Lin Lane June 10, 2023 at 6:37 PM Thanks so very much, Janice.

Andrea Dietrich June 10, 2023 at 12:39 PM Wow, this is a gorgeous set of little poems. Lin Lane June 10, 2023 at 1:16 PM Hi Andrea, and thanks a bunch for liking these.

Mark Koplin June 10, 2023 at 7:23 AM It's good to see your poetry cited for its worth, my friend. Hope it does well in the contest. Lin Lane June 10, 2023 at 7:26 AM Hi Mark and thank you for the kind comments. You are missed!

Mike Gentile June 10, 2023 at 5:12 AM Lin, your gorgeous tribute to the flower of the sun is just a pleasure to read! Happy Saturday xxoo Lin Lane June 10, 2023 at 6:04 AM To receive compliments on my poetry from you makes any day a happy one. Thanks very much, Mike.

Jay Narain June 9, 2023 at 4:50 PM Seems like this website is full of great poets. You are also the one. Pem is so nice Sunflower pops up in front of my eyes. You are a winner. Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 5:01 PM There are many wonderful poets on this site, Jay. I’m honored that you place me among them. Thank you very much.

David Kavanagh June 9, 2023 at 3:04 PM What a poem Lin, a little masterpiece here, I honestly think no photo is required, the abstract imagery works better just absorbing and building the picture in my mind, a beautiful piece, cheers David Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 5:00 PM David, your POV is one of the ones that’s matters most to me. Jan: you and David are always at my side whatever the circumstances. I never take our friendship for granted Jan Allison June 9, 2023 at 4:15 PM Whatever form she writes Lin's poetry is always exceptional David Kavanagh June 9, 2023 at 4:10 PM I can only speak from my own pov Lin, your poetic imagery is off the scale, and takes my mind way beyond the photo! Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 3:34 PM I think you’re right, David. No words can gild a lily or a sunflower better than a mind’s eye. I will remove it and leave the vision to my readers. I’m always grateful for your supportive reviews. Thank you!

Jan Allison June 9, 2023 at 1:06 PM Oh Lin this is so beautiful - great minds think alike as I mentioned Sunflowers in my poem for the contest too:-) hugs jan xx Ilove the personification especially brown eyed cyclops. hugs jan xx Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 1:57 PM Thank you Jan and we spend so much time together that it’s no wonder our minds wander the same path!

Sam Kauffman June 9, 2023 at 12:56 PM Lin, so beautifully expressed. Lovely word pairings and images that carry each section of your poem. Best wishes for the contest. Blessings! Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 1:55 PM Hi Sam and thank you so very much for the great comments.

Tom Cunningham June 9, 2023 at 12:55 PM Beautiful flowers they are too Lin, we grow them every year. Hope you're well now enjoy your weekend. Tom Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 1:54 PM Thanks a bunch and yes they are beauties, Tom. I’m still in recovery mode but feeling a titch better.

Bj Legros Kelley June 9, 2023 at 11:19 AM Oh, gosh, breathlessly gorgeous is your poem Lin. I love sunflowers, they are my favorite flower, and I have never read a more beautiful poem written about them. This would be so beautiful on a painting or print of sunflowers. A fave for certain! <3 Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 11:37 AM Dear BJ. You have become such a sweet friend and I appreciate every kind word you’ve written about my sunflower melange. To their unquestionable beauty… cheers!