Gold and Sand Grain

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*gold fusion syllable-based; 5-3-5 Faint, sparkling crystals Gold rings melt for the sun to steal Extolling the merits of specific metals. Yet, many buyers seek advice from a jewelry salesperson during buying decision process and leave with little relevant insight. ~~~~~~~~~ **sand grain word-based; 3-5-3. Delicious soft sand Akin to the sugar sweetness my feet clinging ~~ Verses of great poet William Blake: To see a world in a grain of sand And a heaven in a wildflower, Hold infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. Written: October 16, 2021 Lune (Mixed Pair) Poetry Contest Sponsored by: William Kekaula

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Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 10/27/2021 9:31:00 AM

Enchanting...Delice

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 10/17/2021 9:26:00 AM

I love the gorgeous words and imagery of these fantastic haikus, Lasaad. Best wishes for a win, Evelyn

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/17/2021 5:38:00 AM

Nice! I love the sugar-sand!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/17/2021 1:36:00 AM

Well written Lasaad, these should place well, took a dive for the worst, thought I was on the mend but spent most of the week in bed, im on antibiotics now and feel better for it. Hope you're well. Tom

Sotto Poet
Date: 10/17/2021 6:25:00 AM

Thank you so much for your insightful comment. I hope you feel better soon. After antibiotics courses of almost a month, I start feeling well. Take good care of yourself my friend. My best wishes to you.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/16/2021 10:23:00 PM

Three beautiful haikus, much to be admired.

Sotto Poet
Date: 10/17/2021 6:26:00 AM

Thanks Victor but the contest is just 2 Haikus.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/16/2021 5:02:00 PM

Dear Lasaad, I admire the vivid imagery in your mixed pair of poems. Both are beautiful and distinct yet fit together wonderfully. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my friend.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2021 3:57:00 PM

these are very lovely. I am curious if it was necessary for the contest to include a famous poem on the bottom like you did. It's a great poem anyway, by William Blake!!

Sotto Poet
Date: 10/16/2021 4:02:00 PM

Thanks for your thoughtful comment, Andrea; I didn't think it was necessary to add the famous poet; it just fits with the Haiku theme.