God, Let Them Hear, To Bob and Dad

God, if you would please
let my Brother hear,
what I have to say
I did not have time
while he was alive

Now he is dead
thirty years now
when we were kids
you taught me much

about life,
about school,
about pride,

Miss you!
need you !

Love!

Love !

You showed,
You Gave,

to us all,
to our Mom,
then Bob died,

you lost all hope,
your first born Son,
and I was there,
and saw it all,

I am sorry if,
I disappoint you,
I wish that I had,
one more moment to,
say that I love you!


 This is kind of a new creation for me. This is a double Reverse Diminished Hexaverse. 
This is dedicated to My Brother Bob, and my Father...God Bless you Both... I Love you !

For Michael Falotico's contest....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 9/7/2011 2:22:00 PM
I don't think your dad could for one moment think of you as a disappointment. Sometimes voids are left when loved ones pass on and we deal with the heartache in different ways. I for one had this fear that if I love too much something bad might happen. Maybe your dad had the same fear.. Okay that is just my two cents on this beautiful, heartfelt write. It is so good to read these gems especially this time of the evening.. Good luck for the contest :) oh yes Pantoum is posted, thanks for forcing me to try a form I would otherwise have avoided. Hope it is up to standard ;) Wilma
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Date: 9/6/2011 10:28:00 PM
What a wonderful poem you created, Taz. So nice to see you back and good luck in the contest!
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Date: 9/6/2011 9:45:00 PM
Awesome all the way around, Taz. It's a winner and I ain't talkin' the contest
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