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Give me a Break

This pen now wants some rest, this mind is now tired a lot, like a mute bird in its nest no more song now,no more thoughts. This mind is now tired a lot, though the moon is in the sky no more song now,no more thoughts, no more words now,don't ask me why. Though the moon is in the sky, your eyes still so blue and deep, no more words now,don't ask me why give me a break now,let me sleep. Your eyes still so blue and deep; like a mute bird in its nest give me a break now,let me sleep, this pen now wants some rest. ©kash poet (kashinath karmakar) ***************************** Placement:2nd; January 2013 Contest:One to One (all monosyllable words) Sponsor:David Williams ============000============ PANTOUM--A rare form of poetry similar to a villanelle. It is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first and third lines of the next. This pattern continues for any number of stanzas, except for the final stanza, which differs in the repeating pattern. The first and third lines of the last stanza are the second and fourth of the penultimate; the first line of the poem is the last line of the final stanza, and the third line of the first stanza is the second of the final. Ideally, the meaning of lines shifts when they are repeated although the words remain exactly the same: this can be done by shifting punctuation, punning, or simply recontextualizing. ================000==============
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Date: 3/24/2013 10:15:00 AM
I can really find myself in this poem. Being surrounded by beautiful things and yet your pen just refuses to make words. I think it's natures way of saying you need to rest and take a break... words will come when they feel most natural. And forcing your words will just defeat the purpose of it all... thanks for sharing!
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Date: 2/15/2013 8:31:00 AM
:) my dear guru Kashi,,, i luv reading your poems... always so amazing..:) thank you for supports and your stoping by... appreciate is so very very much :) wishing you all the best dearest one <3 Sk
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Date: 2/2/2013 7:20:00 PM
great poem for the contest! congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/1/2013 7:59:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!loved your poem
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Date: 1/30/2013 9:28:00 PM
Hello Kash, a very nice win in David's "one to one" contest~ :-) PD
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Date: 1/30/2013 8:43:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win. Nice to see a great poem. Sorry I've been off site for awhile. Just dropping by to read a few good poets. Lee
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Date: 1/28/2013 11:07:00 AM
a beautiful poem...congrats on ur win...:))
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Date: 1/28/2013 9:58:00 AM
ah Kash...you say so much in every form you use...fabulous my friend!! So melloncally! Well done and Congratulations on your win! big hugsss,love, deb
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Date: 1/28/2013 6:55:00 AM
Great job, Kash! I love it. Congratulations :)
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Date: 1/27/2013 10:37:00 PM
This form is not easy to write in but you mastered it wonderfully! Congrats on your deserving win!
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Date: 1/27/2013 3:38:00 PM
Very touching! Congratulations.
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Date: 1/27/2013 3:09:00 PM
congrats on a great win Kash
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Date: 1/27/2013 12:54:00 PM
A wonderful one word pantoum! I know this wasn't easy to do, but you make it look like it was flawless. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/27/2013 12:23:00 PM
congratulations Kash for this one to one...great job...
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Date: 1/27/2013 11:59:00 AM
Kash, congratulations on your placement, this was excellent from start to end and you chose a great form to write it in...very creative...David
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Date: 1/17/2013 4:43:00 AM
Dear Kash, The heart of the poet cannot remain silent for it is bewitched by the Muse! You will be back stronger! I look forward to reading your poems. Fabulous writing! Thank you for your visit!
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Date: 1/13/2013 6:24:00 PM
I can identify, Kash...I dry up every 2-3 months...it usually lasts about a week...well done my friend - Tim
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Date: 1/13/2013 2:48:00 PM
love this witty write, Kash - congrats on all your wins : )
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Date: 1/13/2013 1:18:00 PM
We all get tired my friend,,,rest. Light & Love
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Date: 1/13/2013 9:59:00 AM
This is a great pantoum my dear friend Kash! I love it! Sometimes, we need to rest for a while......yes, i think it is better if it is "just for a while". Thank you so much for sharing this and your precious time visiting my latest poem leaving me a wonderful comment. Wish you all the best and happiness. love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 1/12/2013 10:19:00 PM
don't you rest just yet. just LOOK what an amazing poem you came up with by simply writing about not being inspired. Keep it up, Kash, I love this.
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Date: 1/12/2013 4:00:00 PM
This is a fabulous and fantastic write my friend! I thoroughly enjoyed reading you masterful and tremendous poem this afternoon! What a powerful and delightful piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 1/12/2013 3:58:00 PM
Great Pantoum, Kash! Wonderful descriptions... Terry
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Date: 1/12/2013 12:56:00 PM
yes of course we must all call it a night at one point even our pens, in this case my computer always needs its rest, very much enjoyed this one kash poet, ~always & forever~PD
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Date: 1/12/2013 11:15:00 AM
Great write! Enjoyed reading your work today! _--Lori
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