Sue Mason Poet Fibonacci

Ghetto Summer (Redo)

I
smell
summer
in the air
humidity fumes
reflecting off dusty windows.



Thanks Sharon for pointing out lines 1/2 in a fibonacci are both only 
one syllable.  Doesn't read as dramatic but it works ... smile ...

************  for Brian Strand's contest  ******************

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Teresita Cailo June 4, 2009 at 5:09 AM Though its kind of late, still I want to say congratulations for your first place win in Mr. Brian's contest :) Teri

Brian Strand June 3, 2009 at 8:29 AM Sue just to say I airmailed your prize this morning.Rgds Brian

Brian Strand June 3, 2009 at 12:20 AM One beautiful image for my favourites.Rgds Brian

Barbara Gorelick June 2, 2009 at 5:59 PM congrats on your !ST PLACE WIN...wow. BG

June 2, 2009 at 1:12 PM Congratulations on your first place finish in Brian's contest Sue! This is such a wonderful poem. I am so happy for you. Enjoy your honor! Keep up the good writing. Karen

Sharon Winter June 2, 2009 at 10:29 AM YAY Sue! Congrats on your First Place win!!! Bravo and well deserved! Love, Shar

Carrie Richards June 2, 2009 at 6:41 AM Such a true to life image, can almost breathe in the musty air!! Great job...terrific win!! Congratulations Sue, on your winning poem!! Love, Carrie

Brian Strand June 2, 2009 at 6:20 AM Congrats on your success in my contest Sue.Please soupmail me a forwarding address for your prize.Rgds Brian

Daver Austin May 27, 2009 at 3:24 PM Never have been in the ghetto, but I have been on tour with symphony orhestras and stayed at roach motels....same thing i guess. A very distressing piece, ah, BUT GOOD. love, daver

Carolyn Devonshire May 26, 2009 at 6:17 PM You certainly nailed this portrait of summer in the ghetto, Sue. Excellent fibonacci form, too. Love, Carolyn

May 26, 2009 at 1:19 PM Nice use of imagery and alliteration for a creative view. Good luck in the contest. The title is fitting. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a nice day! Karen

Des Juan Richardson May 26, 2009 at 11:21 AM Brilliant imagery! You made me home sick! LOL ~ Des Juan

Kristin Reynolds May 26, 2009 at 10:22 AM AAWWWWSOME. truly awesome, visual, sensory fib. loved this, miss you, love, Kristin :)

Sharon Winter May 26, 2009 at 6:59 AM I can feel it and smell it. Transporting imagery. Excellent! Love, Shar

Christopher Higgins May 26, 2009 at 5:09 AM Interesting piece of poetry..best wishes.

Michael Jordan May 25, 2009 at 10:38 PM Hi Sue I'm sure sorry it has been so long - this is a great answer to Brian's contest - YF4L - God Bless, MJ