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Fragmented Spaces
Invented by Constance La France.

Verse 1
Line 1    indent 24 spaces    6 words   rhyme option  A
Line 2    indent 12 spaces    8 words   rhyme option  B
Line 3    no indent             10 words   rhyme option  A
Line 4    no indent             10 words   rhyme option  B  

Verse 2 
Line 5      indent 24 spaces        6 words   rhyme option  C
Line 6      no indentation          10 words   rhyme option  C
Line 7      no indentation          10 words   rhyme option  C

Verse 3  
Line 8     indent 6 spaces      10 words     rhyme option D
Line 9     indent 12 spaces       8 words    rhyme option D
Line 10   indent 24 spaces       6 words    rhyme option D

Verse 4
Line 11   no indentation          10 words   rhyme option  A
Line 12   indent 12 spaces      10 words    rhyme option B
Line 13   indent 6 spaces          6 words    rhyme option C
Line 14   indent 24 spaces        8 words    rhyme option D

I grew to fear my dad he’d often beat me for the slightest thing. A damaged, drunken man, he was close to going mad, a tyrant and bully, in his house, he was king. I remember the day we met I was three when he returned home, a war vet, smelling of stale beer and the stench of a cigarette. Back then, the symptoms of posttraumatic stress disorder were unknown soldiers simply dealt with it on their own, and men’s hearts hardened like stone. All those years lost to an illness make me sad, yet I decided long ago to forgive him for everything, rationalizing what took forever to forget, though no gesture of love was ever shown. Fragmented Spaces 7/21/2021 Writing Prompt - Fragmented Spaces Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France (118 Words)

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Date: 8/17/2021 8:08:00 AM
Emile, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt, Fragmented Spaces, using my created form. You made my form look marvelous, well done. Your childhood must have been difficult, you are strong to be able to forgive ~Constance
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Emile Pinet
Date: 8/17/2021 11:18:00 AM
Thanks, Constance, I appreciate the placing and as always, your comments are most welcomed and appreciated my friend, Emile.
Date: 8/13/2021 11:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Great.
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Date: 8/14/2021 6:23:00 AM
Thanks, Bhawana, your comments are appreciated my friend, Emile.
Date: 8/13/2021 9:05:00 PM
Powerful write, Emile, congratulations on your win in Constance's contest . Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/14/2021 6:23:00 AM
Thanks, Eve, as always, your comments are appreciated my friend, Emile.
Date: 8/13/2021 10:59:00 AM
Emilie, congratulations on your elegant poem Emile. You have taken us through every element of a journey that ultimately ended in understanding and forgiveness with images that impact and raw emotions that touch. Like Edward, I am so sorry you experienced such pain. Blessings to you dear friend.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 8/13/2021 12:01:00 PM
Thanks, Sam, we all have our crosses to bear, unfortunately, mine came early in life, as always, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 8/13/2021 10:23:00 AM
Morose, powerful piece, Emile. I'm so sorry you went through such a terrible, harrowing experience. The fact you've forgiven your abusive father shows what a wonderful soul you really are. Congratulations on your win, my friend!
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Emile Pinet
Date: 8/13/2021 10:41:00 AM
Thanks, Edward, as always, your comments are most welcomed and appreciated my friend, Emile.
Date: 8/13/2021 8:05:00 AM
A very beautiful write. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 8/13/2021 10:41:00 AM
Thanks, Christuraj, as always, your comments are appreciated my friend, Emile.
Date: 7/22/2021 8:20:00 PM
How sad for all your family Emile. These men should have been treated better. It is like living with a stranger. The trauma these soldiers went through spoilt the rest of their lives. Your poem was very heartfelt. Beautifully penned. Thank you. Take care... Shirley
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Emile Pinet
Date: 7/23/2021 6:28:00 AM
Thank you, Shirley, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 7/21/2021 10:37:00 AM
Emile, so fine. I was four when my dad returned from the Pacific at the end of WWII. So, I have a similar story. Soup Mail.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 7/21/2021 12:46:00 PM
Thanks, Milt, as always, your comments are most welcomed and appreciated my friend, Emile.

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