Gaze

The victims lined up all of my internal organs the shard of her plunged into each leaving scores slowly dying when cold entered my heart I grasped the blade and withdrew along with it and when her gaze tickled the wound she didn't find me there

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/8/2016 12:43:00 PM

- Poetry: Music in words .... rhythmic expression of emotion, like the nectar of the bee, you are sharing here with us Jeffrey :) - Welcome to Poetry Soup :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/5/2016 2:02:00 PM

Jeffrey, ,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Moon Flower

Date: 6/4/2016 8:27:00 AM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Jeffrey. :)

Skat A

Date: 6/4/2016 12:46:00 AM

A deep read, Jeffrey, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**