Heidi Sands Poet Ghazal

Gaping Pain

Ghazal form poetry contest
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Placed 3rd:

The empty house is silent, I can't see
Blinded by grief, it has overcome me

Your voice is not heard, dawn to the sunset
The loss of your strength has overcome me

Tears won't bring you back, I love and I lost
Heartbreak melancholy overcomes me

I'm broken, but your memories will heal
Through gaping pain that has overcome me

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Nancy Kaufman March 1, 2024 at 1:14 PM Dear Heidi, The title, "Gaping pain" and the way you expressed grief in the loss of your loved one is so poignant and crushing. It tears at a reader's soul. I am so sorry. Heidi Sands March 1, 2024 at 1:26 PM Thank you so much. I haven't done this form of poetry much and when I did, it ended up being about this. I cannot thank you enough for the time you have taken today to read my poetry and offer such nice support. I hope all is well for you and your day is going well :)

Sam Kauffman February 7, 2024 at 11:39 AM Heidi, congrats and high fives for your win! Well done as you express grief, heartbreak and loss so succinctly through the metaphor of the empty house! Sending you continued prayers and blessings. Heidi Sands February 7, 2024 at 12:24 PM Hi Sam. Thank you very much. Blessings :)

Sara Kendrick February 7, 2024 at 5:13 AM Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Exception work in the fact that you had a lower syllable count. Sara K Heidi Sands February 7, 2024 at 5:20 AM Thank you very much Sara . I apologize for any mistakes. I will edit the sunset line. :)

Vijay Pandit January 25, 2024 at 5:50 AM Emotive ghazal, my friend. Sad to see a house empty--where there are so many beloved memories. Heidi Sands January 25, 2024 at 6:10 AM Thank you Vijay.:)

Daniel Henry Rodgers January 24, 2024 at 7:02 PM Heidi I really enjoy poems that evoke emotions in me and yours did. I can feel the pain and can empathize. - Blessings, Daniel Heidi Sands January 25, 2024 at 5:14 AM Thank you very much Daniel :)

Jerry Brotherton January 24, 2024 at 6:27 PM Well done, Heidi. A brilliant poem for the contest. Have a wonderful day, my friend. Heidi Sands January 25, 2024 at 5:13 AM Thank you Jerry :)

Darlene De Beaulieu January 24, 2024 at 3:36 PM Hello Heidi, A loss of a pet is very hard to accept. We love so much it is hard to let them go. You will have good memories of the loss your pet. Hugs.Darlene/ Darlene De Beaulieu January 25, 2024 at 5:58 AM Hello Heidi, you are welcome. Think of the happy times you had. Hugs. /Darlene/ Heidi Sands January 24, 2024 at 4:01 PM Yes, you are right Darlene. Thank you for taking the time to comment. Blessings :)

Tom Cunningham January 24, 2024 at 1:06 PM The loss of a loved one causes unimaginable pain, you never really get over it Heidi. I can feel your pain in your words. Tom Heidi Sands January 24, 2024 at 1:13 PM You are right Tom. You never really get over it. Thank you my friend :)