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Gaping Pain

Ghazal form poetry contest Sponsor : Sotto poet Placed 3rd: The empty house is silent, I can't see Blinded by grief, it has overcome me Your voice is not heard, dawn to the sunset The loss of your strength has overcome me Tears won't bring you back, I love and I lost Heartbreak melancholy overcomes me I'm broken, but your memories will heal Through gaping pain that has overcome me 1/24/24 (C)opyright

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Nancy Kaufman

Date: 3/1/2024 1:14:00 PM

Dear Heidi, The title, "Gaping pain" and the way you expressed grief in the loss of your loved one is so poignant and crushing. It tears at a reader's soul. I am so sorry.

Heidi Sands
Date: 3/1/2024 1:26:00 PM

Thank you so much. I haven't done this form of poetry much and when I did, it ended up being about this. I cannot thank you enough for the time you have taken today to read my poetry and offer such nice support. I hope all is well for you and your day is going well :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 2/7/2024 11:39:00 AM

Heidi, congrats and high fives for your win! Well done as you express grief, heartbreak and loss so succinctly through the metaphor of the empty house! Sending you continued prayers and blessings.

Heidi Sands
Date: 2/7/2024 12:24:00 PM

Hi Sam. Thank you very much. Blessings :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/7/2024 5:13:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Exception work in the fact that you had a lower syllable count. Sara K

Heidi Sands
Date: 2/7/2024 5:20:00 AM

Thank you very much Sara . I apologize for any mistakes. I will edit the sunset line. :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/25/2024 5:50:00 AM

Emotive ghazal, my friend. Sad to see a house empty--where there are so many beloved memories.

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/25/2024 6:10:00 AM

Thank you Vijay.:)

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 1/24/2024 7:02:00 PM

Heidi I really enjoy poems that evoke emotions in me and yours did. I can feel the pain and can empathize. - Blessings, Daniel

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/25/2024 5:14:00 AM

Thank you very much Daniel :)

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 1/24/2024 6:27:00 PM

Well done, Heidi. A brilliant poem for the contest. Have a wonderful day, my friend.

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/25/2024 5:13:00 AM

Thank you Jerry :)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/24/2024 3:36:00 PM

Hello Heidi, A loss of a pet is very hard to accept. We love so much it is hard to let them go. You will have good memories of the loss your pet. Hugs.Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 1/25/2024 5:58:00 AM

Hello Heidi, you are welcome. Think of the happy times you had. Hugs. /Darlene/

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/24/2024 4:01:00 PM

Yes, you are right Darlene. Thank you for taking the time to comment. Blessings :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/24/2024 1:06:00 PM

The loss of a loved one causes unimaginable pain, you never really get over it Heidi. I can feel your pain in your words. Tom

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/24/2024 1:13:00 PM

You are right Tom. You never really get over it. Thank you my friend :)