frankly speaking

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Poetic Form: Senryu

Inspired: 2024 August 10

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fool me once shame on me ~ fool me twice shame on you ~ but more I ignore ... facts of life ~ well taught lives well ~ so-so not so well ~ not at all ... jail cell Spring to life ... summer lounge ... fall remembered ~ then say colder than least year I dream to forget you ... not at night but by day ~ you haunt my nightmares ... *heard you of ... four two three then none ... handstand yoga taught by an angel *baby crawl on fours, adult stands on two, elder's cane makes three, Heavenly carry leaves none ~ then mine is a parody pun.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/12/2024 4:04:00 AM

I think that someone we once loved is never forgotten but becomes a faint memory that sometimes comes to light but each time it means less and less. Interesting work you have penned. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/12/2024 10:07:00 AM

Tis perplexing yet weighs heavy as a constant dismissing ambiguity, rather profundity and or recondite that could sway directions to either a darkening burden, or a deep blessing, thank you Sara. Aloha William

thriveni c mysore

Date: 8/11/2024 2:27:00 AM

+FAV. profound write. Happy writing dear poet.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/11/2024 4:22:00 AM

thriveni my friend, you're an angel on Earth. Aloha William