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Fragile hearts For many years romance blossomed covertly Robert was the man of Ami’s dreams. Sadly Ami's parents had promised her hand to Giurkiran and the arranged marriage was to take place in India. Ami rebelled against her parents wishes, she Loved Robert with all her heart so they Eloped and married in secret. Her parents immediately disowned her and Even when Ami eventually gave birth to Ajar their first grandchild, they refused to see them. Realisation finally dawned and day after day Ami’s Tears fell. Unable to cope with what she had done She died of a broken heart. 10~16~16 Contest Fragile hearts Sponsored by John Hamilton

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Sandra Haight

Date: 10/25/2016 8:23:00 AM

So sad, but such a well-written Acrostic, Jan. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Sushma A. Singh

Date: 10/25/2016 6:26:00 AM

Congrats on this emotional piece! Not uncommon with some Indians...

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 10/25/2016 4:20:00 AM

Very sad to the core..... That was one emotional piece, Jan...

Sofia Ra

Date: 10/20/2016 12:58:00 AM

This was written beautifully. So sad this is reality for so many...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2016 4:50:00 PM

Thanks Sofia it is indeed a sad situation:-( hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/17/2016 8:23:00 PM

Her child was A jar? Never mind! Touching and oh so real for some cultures. A Fav.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 2:46:00 AM

lol Armand:-) I just went to google to find Indian boys names lol:-)Sadly it still happens and I've also heard of the women being murdered by the family for bringing shame to them by marrying out of the religion:-( hugs Jan xx

Jack Horne

Date: 10/17/2016 6:16:00 AM

sad but excellent write here, my friend x

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 2:15:00 PM

Thanks Jack:-) I hope John likes it for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 10/17/2016 5:44:00 AM

Very sad story indeed - well capture Jan Mark

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 2:15:00 PM

thanks Mark:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/17/2016 2:14:00 AM

- A theme that should be strongly illuminated, Jan - Very well written ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 4:48:00 AM

Thanks so much Anne Lise. I'm not sure if it's what John is after on the fragile hearts theme but I go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 10/17/2016 12:06:00 AM

Sadly, Jan, this happens all too often- we have an organisation that started in Derby called Karma Nirvana, I believe, that gave support and assistance to those being pressured into such marriages. Good write. Good luck. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 12:17:00 AM

OMG according to the last electoral role the whole family still appear to be living at the same address in Chaddesden where I grew up!!! amazing:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2016 12:12:00 AM

I based the poem on when I was growing up in Derby - a friend of mine had an Asian girlfriend and they had to meet in secret - he worked in the family business in Normanton and that is where they had met:-) I must google see if I can trace him:-) hugs jan x

Darren White

Date: 10/16/2016 11:05:00 PM

This happens yes, far too much. It also happens to gay people who are forced to get married by parents, and it makes both partners in any form of forced marriage unhappy. Just as being disowned is utterly devastating.....

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 11:22:00 PM

I had a gay friend who got married simply to conform to his parents wishes but he and his wife had other partners so they were both happy in the end - the marriage was just one of convenience to appease his family:-( hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2016 8:45:00 PM

This really happens in our crazy world, Jan. I enjoyed your story approach to this contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 10:15:00 PM

Its so so sad Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/16/2016 7:40:00 PM

sadly, arranged marriages still happen, jan.. my friend is caught in it at the moment.. beautifully rendered, dear!..huggs and SOUPIE!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 10:11:00 PM

Thanks for confirming that Nette - so so sad to be forced to love someone you don't love. I've read of 'honour killings' where the girl is killed by relations as she has brought shame on the family:-( quite heartbreaking:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/16/2016 6:59:00 PM

Love is God's great gift to Man and should be a personal matter. A tragic poem relating the story that many have been through in many parts of the world dear, Jan! Hope this is just a well-written fiction! Good luck my friend!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 7:03:00 PM

Fiction write for contest but if you read my comment to Tim it i very loosely based on that - i must google to see what happened to Anthony but it may be difficult to trace him after all these years:-( hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/16/2016 6:39:00 PM

I suppose in some cultures they still have arranged marriages. Really never understood them but I guess it comes from living in a place where women have rights. It would be a difficult decision to choose between parents and husband/wife. Very sad story, Jan. Good luck:)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 6:44:00 PM

There are still arranged marriages - I've been told sometimes the bride meets her groom for the first time when she goes over for the wedding:-( let's hope her parents have made the right decision!:-( hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/16/2016 5:31:00 PM

so sad but so well told! best of luck in the contest, jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 5:34:00 PM

I hope it fits the fragile hearts theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/16/2016 5:28:00 PM

What a story, twists, turns, and names I can't pronounce, definitely worthy soup opera material :) hugsx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 5:53:00 PM

ok I won't:-) thanks:-) xx

Casarah Nance
Date: 10/16/2016 5:35:00 PM

Oh don't change it, It was really enjoyable and unique just like you! ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 5:34:00 PM

LOL Cas I thought if I went for Indian names it would be more authentic - I will see if I can find an easier one to say:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/16/2016 4:37:00 PM

Great story telling and a cute cartoon.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 4:48:00 PM

Thanks Richard:-) I'm not sure if it fits the fragile hearts theme but I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/16/2016 4:21:00 PM

Very sad Jan when a mother will disown a daughter over matters of the heart.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/16/2016 4:37:00 PM

The poem reminds me so much of a lad I knew when I was growing up he was white his girlfriend was Asian and they had to meet in secret - I never know what happened as I moved away from home. Must google see if i can trace him:-) hugs Jan xx