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Someone help me Listen to my plea I beg you Four walls surround me I’m imprisoned in a padded cell Locked up for 24 hours a day Like a caged tiger in a zoo I crave daylight I don’t know if I will ever see my children again Death would be a viable option … This is no life; I am like the living dead I didn’t commit any crime I shouldn’t be here - a miscarriage of justice Misidentified by a photo fit image Whilst the real killer That evil swine still lurks out there He must be laughing at my misfortune Yet he is free to breathe fresh air To see the sun, feel the wind on his face Yet I sit alone in isolation, in squalor Bars on the tiny window, in the door an iron grille I live in purgatory forevermore Whilst my twin brother walks free Contest Four walls Sponsored by A. A 02~23~16

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George Yiorgos Stathakis

Date: 4/14/2021 8:19:00 PM

Love the ending. Beautifully done Jan, and congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2021 9:45:00 AM

thanks so much George:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/12/2021 2:27:00 PM

A big CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Jan. What an ending! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 2:20:00 PM

Thanks Janice I've been going through my poems and found some more serious style poems for Brian's contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Rob Carmack

Date: 3/11/2016 4:43:00 PM

I was surprised by the ending, congrats on your win Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 4:58:00 PM

Thanks Rob I do like to write with a twist at the end if I can:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/11/2016 2:56:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your nice win, Jan. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:25:00 PM

Thanks so much Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 3/11/2016 12:57:00 PM

Excellent poem Jan. Congratulations on the placement of the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:25:00 PM

Thanks Nayda:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 3/11/2016 11:35:00 AM

Congrats Jan...very well deserved...god bless...^WW^:):):)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:26:00 PM

Thanks so much ^WW^ :-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/11/2016 10:22:00 AM

Jan, Congratulations on your "4 walls" win.... Love LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:26:00 PM

Thanks for your continued support Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

C T

Date: 3/11/2016 10:14:00 AM

thanks jan

Jan Allison
Date: 3/11/2016 3:27:00 PM

Cheers Chase:-) hugs Jan xx

Funom Makama

Date: 3/5/2016 11:11:00 AM

Wonderful! Wonderful! So so so wonderful....

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2016 6:06:00 PM

Thanks so much Funom:-) hugs Jan xx

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 3/2/2016 4:55:00 AM

Very good written four walls xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2016 7:11:00 AM

Thanks Wendy:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/27/2016 7:57:00 PM

Yikes. This would be an awful circumstance to find yourself in! You captured the helplessness very well ... reminds me of the Man in the Iron Mask.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2016 9:22:00 AM

Thanks Timothy I do worry about my muse sometimes I never know what will appear next!:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 2/26/2016 9:26:00 AM

Very good write and interesting one of my big fears being locked up. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 2/26/2016 9:32:00 AM

I would hate it Eve:-( hugs jan xx

White Sage

Date: 2/25/2016 7:11:00 AM

well, that's the only one reason why i never want to be a twin...nice write Jan, best of luck in the contest

Jan Allison
Date: 2/25/2016 12:51:00 PM

Nor me - I think this scenario must be the ultimate betrayal :-( Thanks so much for your support White Sage:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/24/2016 6:13:00 PM

A great poem for the theme, Jan. Love the twist at the end! Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 6:16:00 PM

Thanks Sandra i do worry about my muse sometimes lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vera Duggan

Date: 2/24/2016 6:03:00 PM

Great poem Jan, your imagination has run away with you, wouldn't it be awful if this actually happened and it most likely has on some occasions, good luck in the contest and take care........Vera

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 6:07:00 PM

Oh Vera how wonderful to see you:-) thanks for your lovely comment - I guess miscarriages of justice do happen but this would be a real tragedy if it was real wouldn't it:-( hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/24/2016 4:15:00 PM

Enjoyed reading this compelling drama..If for a contest, reads like a winner..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 4:22:00 PM

Thanks Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 2/24/2016 10:27:00 AM

Jan, you kept me in the dark right up to the final line! Another very good write with a perfect twist. gl in the contest. hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 11:19:00 AM

Are you saying I'm twisted Paul lol... I do worry about my muse sometimes:-) hugs Jan xx

John Hardison

Date: 2/23/2016 10:03:00 PM

Good portrayal of dual imprisonment and 'brotherly' injustice. Lots of luck in contest. Peace, Love and Joy

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 8:22:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by John:-) hugs Jan xx

Carlene Simpson

Date: 2/23/2016 9:50:00 PM

Great imagery Jan. though I wish that on no one.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 8:22:00 AM

Thanks Carlene:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/23/2016 8:35:00 PM

Sorry Bro thems' the breaks! LOL Seriously now, a great write Jan and you have inspired me!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 11:43:00 AM

So both you and Paul think I'm twisted lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso
Date: 2/24/2016 11:32:00 AM

Not at all, I really liked this one you did Jan, the topic as well and the twist at the end!!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2016 8:23:00 AM

I've read your poem - makes mine look like a mickey mouse writer :-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 2/23/2016 3:59:00 PM

lol....have you ever seen Arrested Development?

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2016 4:10:00 PM

oh really lol - I watch murder mystery's but I doubt anyone would want to swap for life imprisonment in solitary confinement it doesn't sound funny to me! :-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 2/23/2016 4:08:00 PM

it is a comedy series, where twin brothers exchange places in jail

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2016 4:05:00 PM

no Tim never - is it a film - if so I rarely watch them but I do watch british crime drama's on tv and 'lie to me':-) hugs jan xx

Jill Spagnola

Date: 2/23/2016 3:55:00 PM

Awesome, creepy, descriptive imagery of plausible, evilly created, brotherly hell! Great write Jan :), jill oo's...

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2016 4:06:00 PM

I do worry about my muse Jill lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2016 3:39:00 PM

ooohhh, I LOVE that twist ending. a shameful twin is he!! Good one, Jan. Like mine, you told a story!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/23/2016 3:42:00 PM

I wrote this at school today - I do worry about my muse sometimes lol:-) hugs Jan xx