Viv Wigley Poet Rhyme

Four Lines- For Contest

With my last note to you I wipe my brow
blue tears left from the ink just barely dry
the time to join you with one sip is now
though I never gave you chance to wonder why


Viv Wigley, 23rd September 2015
For contest 'Four lines', by Broken Wings

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Casarah Nance October 13, 2015 at 6:25 AM These short poems are great, leaves the reader to wonder more, want more, but still satisfied with feeling that moment in time. :) Viv Wigley October 13, 2015 at 7:18 AM Indeedy, Casarah, an enjoyable challenge in it's brevity. Makes my brain hurt, sometimes. Thanks for stopping by, hope you're ticketty-boo. Viv x

Harry Horsman October 6, 2015 at 10:44 AM This is what poetry is all about, a lot said here... Viv Wigley October 6, 2015 at 11:11 PM Thanks Harry, nice to have a challenge with something compact. Regards, Viv

Lindsay Laurie October 5, 2015 at 5:11 PM Very nice Viv - Lindsay Viv Wigley October 6, 2015 at 11:10 PM A dose of deeply darkly- quite a contrast to your Aussie sunshine, Lindsay. Thanks for dropping by. Regards, Viv

Andrea Dietrich October 5, 2015 at 3:48 PM very nice, and now you have me wondering what the contest is all about! Glad I saw this. I bet this one fills up fast. Viv Wigley October 6, 2015 at 11:09 PM Thanks, Andrea. Love, as ever, Viv x

Tim Ryerson October 5, 2015 at 1:08 PM Masterful change of pace from you Viv...Line #2 is KNOCKOUT...

Jan Allison October 4, 2015 at 9:46 AM beautiful yet tinged with sadness Mr Viv:-( hugs Jan xx Jan Allison October 5, 2015 at 12:56 AM in my eyes I'm not beautiful so hide behind my avatar lol:-) Viv Wigley October 5, 2015 at 12:42 AM A bit like you, Jan. Viv x

James Inman October 4, 2015 at 9:11 AM Hey Viv, didn't realize you entered. Sorry for not visiting sooner. Great poem, sad and dark. Could easily fit in Romeo and Juliet. Viv Wigley October 4, 2015 at 9:14 AM Sorry, James, but it wasn't placed. Anyway, thanks for popping by for my deeply darkly. Regards, Viv

Emile Pinet October 1, 2015 at 7:14 PM A very human touch to this poem with an easily understandable story with deep pathos added to it. Emile. Viv Wigley October 1, 2015 at 11:32 PM Merci beaucoup, Emile, thanks for dropping by. Regards, Viv

Anne-Lise Andresen September 29, 2015 at 2:21 PM - Lovely and a little sad ...... - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Viv Wigley September 29, 2015 at 11:38 PM Thanks, Anne Lise, not my normal cheery stuff, but one has to go deeply darkly every now and then. Viv x

Robert Lindley September 25, 2015 at 8:39 AM Great poem,four lines being so limiting. A7 Viv Wigley September 29, 2015 at 12:14 AM Thanks, Robert, brevity can be quite a challenge. I suppose that's why 'I love you' is so short- any longer, and one would sound like they're running for the Senate. Regards to you and yours, Viv

Peter Lewis Holmes September 24, 2015 at 7:59 AM Nice verse Viv...and thanks for the comment...Peter Viv Wigley September 24, 2015 at 8:26 AM Cheers, Peter, it didn't place, but I wrote it as the contest gave me a little inspiration, I never fret aboutwinning. Life's too short. Regards, Viv

Cherl Dunn September 23, 2015 at 9:33 PM Dear Viv Great work for the four lines contest, you done alot with these limitations, I enjoyed the read and good luck in the contest, again a wonderful job, cheri Viv Wigley September 23, 2015 at 11:10 PM Thanks, Cherl, appreciate it. Like the Haiku, always fun to chew over and sometimes get it right. Viv x

Kim Van Breda September 23, 2015 at 2:25 PM Great write Viv...a thought provoking power punch of few words ~~X~~ Viv Wigley September 23, 2015 at 11:09 PM Thanks, Kim, I enjoy the challenge of the smaller poems. Viv x