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Four In Haiku

butterflies flying 
I see them, beautiful 
want to go with them 


rainbow colored skies 
smell of lavender in air
banana pudding on tongue


pearls of gold sunlight 
sapphire blue dripping 
golden leaves falling


trees are standing tall 
birds singing sweet music 
songs of memory filled past

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Andrea Dietrich

April 24, 2017 at 6:03 PM

Maybe I am scanning too fast. Where is your beauty of poetry poem?

Andrea Dietrich

August 25, 2015 at 7:54 PM

I bet I saw this set of haiku before, but it's great to see them again. My favorite is second one. So SWEET with the banana pudding and all!!

Andrea Dietrich

August 25, 2015 at 7:53 PM

Hey, I came back here to discuss our horoscopes. You said OCt. 7, 1955. I am not November. Don't know why you thought that. I am SEpt 5, 1955!! So actually you share a lot of my numbers in numerology. Oct, tenth month is a "1" and that is my name number! 7 is my DESTINY number while for you it is birth day number. Five vibrates extra strongly in me because it is also my birth day number. If I add all your numbers, you are birth path 8 / Destiny 1 and I get along great with ONES!! awesome.

Poet Destroyer A

July 29, 2014 at 5:54 PM

Debbie... A nicely done Haiku.... LINDA

Heather Secrest

July 8, 2013 at 4:50 PM

Sounds like the place to be...now only if there was chocolate... :) great poem -Heather

Anthony O. Mitchell Jr.

April 7, 2013 at 11:32 PM

I'd like to go to that place too. Good one.

Raul Moreno

March 12, 2013 at 9:26 AM

Beautiful imagery

Debbie Duncan

April 21, 2013 at 2:01 AM

Thank you ;}

Jeremy Martin

February 27, 2013 at 2:00 PM

So very vibrant. I like!

Debbie Duncan

February 27, 2013 at 8:20 PM

Thank you Jeremy ;}

The Situation

February 9, 2013 at 3:35 PM

sites in your heaven.

Debbie Duncan

February 16, 2013 at 11:57 PM

Thanks

Matthew Anish

January 26, 2013 at 9:28 PM

I like the one about butterflies the best. Thank you for your kind words. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Sukmawati Komala

January 21, 2013 at 9:16 PM

hi my sweet poetess Debbie... may i join in your feast of happiness...may i ? I do enjoyed so much each line of your lovely impressive write ...<3 <3 <3 luv and hugs :)

Skat A

January 14, 2013 at 2:02 PM

I'm enjoying the wants you share among them butterflies that flutter around you. I also like the sweet taste in your second haiku. ans the 3rd haiku, made me think of my rake. LOL~ and for the 4th haiku. It made me :-( .thank you for the sweet comment~SKAT

Debbie Duncan

January 14, 2013 at 9:10 PM

Thank you for reading ;}

Rollo West

December 29, 2012 at 10:43 PM

Hi Debbie, thank you so much for stopping by my write and leaving a comment. This write of yours is excellent, love the images they give. Hope you have a safe New Year. Rollo

John Posey

December 26, 2012 at 4:28 AM

Debbie, I'm no authority on Haikus, I just struggle and pound my knuckles trying to determine if my poem is qualified as a haiku. I think this entry can be called a haiku..... and a damn good one at that!! Nice Job.... Love Ya, Jake

Andrea Dietrich

November 25, 2012 at 8:12 AM

Glad to see your beautiful haiku this morning. I loved doing mine for that contest. Now I am running out of ideas for any of the other contests! These have incredible imagery. And the banana on tongue is such a unique line!

Debbie Duncan

November 26, 2012 at 12:41 AM

Thank you Audrea ;} I love banana cream, or the banana nut muffins I make " a lot" ;} I've been trying to learn how to write real haiku's.

Sara Kendrick

November 25, 2012 at 4:40 AM

Enjoyed reading your descriptive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Yes, I watch the Red Cardinals out my kitchen window for if I open the door they fly away..Someday I am going out there and just sit and see if they come and eat and drink with me out there..Thanks for stopping by..When I go out on the porch and sit, I see birds from a slight distance..They come with me there unafraid..Your review was uplifting..Sara

Debbie Duncan

November 25, 2012 at 4:35 PM

Thank you Sara,, Love that song " Sara Smile by Hall and Oats ;},,,, I too watch birds out my window. I have a hummingbird feeder, one came in a few years back. I've been reading up on how to write a real haiku,, thank you for reading my words ;}

Holly Moore

November 20, 2012 at 9:35 AM

These are so vivid...I love them. You are a great writer! Thanks for commenting on "Suicide and the Butterfly Boy." That was very sweet of you! xxoo Holly Moore

Debbie Duncan

November 20, 2012 at 10:24 PM

Thank you Holly,,, I enjoy reading yours as well,,,, you have a blessed Thanksgiving ;}

Daver Austin

November 13, 2012 at 10:02 AM

Haiku - you too? Colorful, seasonal, very fine Haiku. Love, daver

Jancarl Campi

November 13, 2012 at 4:29 AM

These haikus are beautiful. Much more pleasing than my "Horsefly" poem that you read. antway, thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. Have a nice day and stay warm, Jancarl

Anthony Nutter

November 12, 2012 at 10:59 AM

Descriptive, each one painting a picture for the minds eye. Nicely done.

Debbie Duncan

November 12, 2012 at 12:28 PM

Thank you Anthony,,, I"m trying to "learn" how to write them ;}

Debbie Guzzi

November 12, 2012 at 6:34 AM

Deb when I write for a contest, what I submit is colored by what I THINK the judge likes, how they themselves see the form, write the form..not all of what label haiku for a contest would I consider haiku [the breast one I would not consider haiku..it is haiku LIKE]

Debbie Duncan

November 12, 2012 at 12:32 PM

I wondered about that " breast" one being a real haiku,,,, yes do show me/ explain ;} thanks Debbie !

Debbie Guzzi

November 12, 2012 at 6:35 AM

let me know if you want me to critique these? I will but I want to help not upset you HUGS!

Michael J. Falotico

November 12, 2012 at 5:42 AM

Love the Haiku form, and do it with much justice... hugs Michael

Debbie Duncan

November 12, 2012 at 12:52 PM

Thank you Michael,,,, I too love the haiku form,,,so I'm trying to learn to write true form ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 12, 2012 at 2:41 AM

Lovely Haiku x 4 - Debbie, well done. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Duncan

November 12, 2012 at 12:50 PM

Thank you Anne,,,, I'm trying to learn to write a true haiku ;}

Laila Andresen Mjelde

November 12, 2012 at 1:59 AM

Good written!! Hugs - Laila

Debbie Duncan

November 12, 2012 at 12:49 PM

Thank you Liala,,,, not sure if there're true haiku ;}

Poet Destroyer A

November 12, 2012 at 12:07 AM

Beautiful Debbie, the last one is a bit sad.... my favorite is the first one.... I like the imagery in which you follow. Makes me want to go to them.... and the one with banana on tongue made me smile.... thank you for sharing..pd

Debbie Duncan

November 12, 2012 at 1:17 AM

Thank you Poet,,, I like the banana on tongue too ;} I tried to keep them on nature,,,, but I love the way you wrote yours ;}

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