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Forgotten

Forgotten heart of mine. Forgotten souls in time. Teetering on the fence of time. As prisms sparkle thru the night. The moon glistens on the leaves. Volcanoes erupt thru the night. I smell the taste of honey on my lips. Passions are controlled by what was once felt. She has become the desire within his veins. The forgotten dreams of his heart drip blood. As they were dropped along the way. The heartbeat of their love was left out in the rain. 12:30 mid-night 9/ 17/ 2013

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Brandon Carter

Date: 3/9/2015 11:04:00 AM

I really like the last line. Strong way to wrap it up.

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther

Date: 1/5/2015 12:15:00 PM

Hello Debbie. I was impressed by the language of FORGOTTEN. KEEP on TRUCKIN' DEBBIE

Robert Johnson

Date: 2/16/2014 9:01:00 AM

What make's someone forget their heart. And cause their lover to depart. The lonely know only too well. What heaven's like, yet still live in hell. Beautiful poem Debbie. Peace. :)

Terry O'Leary

Date: 11/6/2013 7:18:00 PM

"The heartbeat of their love was left out in the rain"... super poem, Debbbie... Terry

Debbie Duncan
Date: 11/6/2013 11:52:00 PM

Thank you Terry ;}

Don Johnson

Date: 10/27/2013 4:14:00 AM

forgotten soul immersed in time, being born till death sublime, not too sure what was my crime, but we will endure it, fine....until... 7th level, sings n chimes... great poem babe....

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/27/2013 2:41:00 PM

Thank you , yours is so much better then mine ;}

John Posey

Date: 10/22/2013 5:52:00 PM

Forgotten.... I think not. Your pen with take your talent into eternity.... Great writing..... Jake

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/22/2013 6:00:00 PM

Thank you John ;}

Patrick Farley Iv

Date: 10/16/2013 11:44:00 AM

Love this poem! -Patrick Farley IV

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/16/2013 2:45:00 PM

Thank you Patrick ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/9/2013 4:03:00 AM

You are not forgotten: CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR B-DAY 07.10.2013, DEBBIE!! ..... (better late than never :)))) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/9/2013 11:55:00 PM

Thank you Anne very much ;}

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/9/2013 1:25:00 AM

Had to read that last line twice. very good ending on your heartfelt poem.

Donna Jones

Date: 10/8/2013 10:08:00 PM

Felt passion - sadness - loneliness... great poem Debbie....and happy belated birthday!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/6/2013 11:39:00 AM

heart wrenchingly lovely, debbie...farewell is such a lonesome proposition... simply marvelous!..:) hugggs

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/8/2013 7:18:00 PM

Thank you nette ;}

Duke Beaufort

Date: 10/4/2013 7:28:00 AM

I have been away for a while myself. Sometimes, I suffer a bit of stagnation. Anyway, you have a style where you change point of views in the middle of your poetry. This always keeps me on guard and makes me have to re-read your work several times to be sure I know what is happening to whom. Then I also go back to the title. The nature of forgetting is difficult to fathom. I think you are right that it is filed away in some form. I also like the fitting praise you give yourself in this.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/5/2013 2:15:00 PM

Well hello Duke , thank you for reading ;}

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/3/2013 8:36:00 PM

Debbie, amazing lines and words.... what a sad feeling when love is left in such a way... your pen is deep... always...Linda

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/3/2013 9:45:00 PM

Thank you Linda ;}

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/3/2013 7:04:00 PM

Favorite line among many: 'Teetering along the fence of time'...Passionate, stunning and absolutely beautiful piece...

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/3/2013 8:11:00 PM

Thank you Tim ;}

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/3/2013 5:11:00 PM

you painted out from the heart beautiful

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/3/2013 12:49:00 PM

Very emotive and expressive work that you have penned in this one..Thanks for the visit to my page..God is good despite things not being good sometimes..We are okay..The is site is still moving slowly because of the work going on to make it better..I hope that all has been good in your life..Sara

Poet Tacito

Date: 10/3/2013 7:43:00 AM

So sad...what a pity for those who do not know how to appreciate something so worthy. Excellent writing & tone.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/3/2013 10:27:00 AM

Thank you Drake ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/3/2013 5:57:00 AM

- Debbie, well written,with touching words ! - All the best to you ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 10/3/2013 11:26:00 AM

Thank you Anne - Lise ;}