Debbie Duncan Poet Dramatic Monologue

Forgotten

Forgotten heart of mine.
Forgotten souls in time.
Teetering on the fence of time.
As prisms sparkle thru the night.
The moon glistens on the leaves.
Volcanoes erupt thru the night.
I smell the taste of honey on my lips.
Passions are controlled by what was once felt.
She has become the desire within his veins.
The forgotten dreams of his heart drip blood.
As they were dropped along the way. 
The heartbeat of their love was left out in the rain.   


12:30 mid-night 9/ 17/ 2013

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Brandon Carter March 9, 2015 at 11:04 AM I really like the last line. Strong way to wrap it up.

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther January 5, 2015 at 12:15 PM Hello Debbie. I was impressed by the language of FORGOTTEN. KEEP on TRUCKIN' DEBBIE

Robert Johnson February 16, 2014 at 9:01 AM What make's someone forget their heart. And cause their lover to depart. The lonely know only too well. What heaven's like, yet still live in hell. Beautiful poem Debbie. Peace. :)

Terry O'Leary November 6, 2013 at 7:18 PM "The heartbeat of their love was left out in the rain"... super poem, Debbbie... Terry Debbie Duncan November 6, 2013 at 11:52 PM Thank you Terry ;}

Don Johnson October 27, 2013 at 4:14 AM forgotten soul immersed in time, being born till death sublime, not too sure what was my crime, but we will endure it, fine....until... 7th level, sings n chimes... great poem babe.... Debbie Duncan October 27, 2013 at 2:41 PM Thank you , yours is so much better then mine ;}

John Posey October 22, 2013 at 5:52 PM Forgotten.... I think not. Your pen with take your talent into eternity.... Great writing..... Jake Debbie Duncan October 22, 2013 at 6:00 PM Thank you John ;}

Patrick Farley Iv October 16, 2013 at 11:44 AM Love this poem! -Patrick Farley IV Debbie Duncan October 16, 2013 at 2:45 PM Thank you Patrick ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen October 9, 2013 at 4:03 AM You are not forgotten: CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR B-DAY 07.10.2013, DEBBIE!! ..... (better late than never :)))) - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Debbie Duncan October 9, 2013 at 11:55 PM Thank you Anne very much ;}

Andrea Dietrich October 9, 2013 at 1:25 AM Had to read that last line twice. very good ending on your heartfelt poem.

Donna Jones October 8, 2013 at 10:08 PM Felt passion - sadness - loneliness... great poem Debbie....and happy belated birthday!

Nette Onclaud October 6, 2013 at 11:39 AM heart wrenchingly lovely, debbie...farewell is such a lonesome proposition... simply marvelous!..:) hugggs Debbie Duncan October 8, 2013 at 7:18 PM Thank you nette ;}

Duke Beaufort October 4, 2013 at 7:28 AM I have been away for a while myself. Sometimes, I suffer a bit of stagnation. Anyway, you have a style where you change point of views in the middle of your poetry. This always keeps me on guard and makes me have to re-read your work several times to be sure I know what is happening to whom. Then I also go back to the title. The nature of forgetting is difficult to fathom. I think you are right that it is filed away in some form. I also like the fitting praise you give yourself in this. Debbie Duncan October 5, 2013 at 2:15 PM Well hello Duke , thank you for reading ;}

Poet Destroyer A October 3, 2013 at 8:36 PM Debbie, amazing lines and words.... what a sad feeling when love is left in such a way... your pen is deep... always...Linda Debbie Duncan October 3, 2013 at 9:45 PM Thank you Linda ;}

Tim Ryerson October 3, 2013 at 7:04 PM Favorite line among many: 'Teetering along the fence of time'...Passionate, stunning and absolutely beautiful piece... Debbie Duncan October 3, 2013 at 8:11 PM Thank you Tim ;}

Liam Mcdaid October 3, 2013 at 5:11 PM you painted out from the heart beautiful

Sara Kendrick October 3, 2013 at 12:49 PM Very emotive and expressive work that you have penned in this one..Thanks for the visit to my page..God is good despite things not being good sometimes..We are okay..The is site is still moving slowly because of the work going on to make it better..I hope that all has been good in your life..Sara

Poet Tacito October 3, 2013 at 7:43 AM So sad...what a pity for those who do not know how to appreciate something so worthy. Excellent writing & tone. Debbie Duncan October 3, 2013 at 10:27 AM Thank you Drake ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen October 3, 2013 at 5:57 AM - Debbie, well written,with touching words ! - All the best to you ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Debbie Duncan October 3, 2013 at 11:26 AM Thank you Anne - Lise ;}