Jan Allison Poet Senryu

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Forgiveness

You stole my boyfriend 
Could not look me in the eye
I cried bitter tears

All contact is stopped 
I missed my childhood best friend
Friendship in tatters

You saw him cheating
Kissing another schoolgirl
Then knew how I felt!

I found you sobbing
We hugged and I forgave you
Friendship now restored

Forgiveness Senryu Contest
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Checked with how many syllables

08~18~16

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Janice Canerdy August 23, 2016 at 1:44 PM Well done, Jan, a 7 for sure! Congrats on your win! Janice

Sara Chansarkar August 23, 2016 at 1:05 PM Lesson learnt and debts settled.All's well that ends well.Loved your story Jan:) Jan Allison August 23, 2016 at 1:08 PM Many thanks Sara - the poem has a happy ending that is the main thing:-) hugs Jan xx

Olusegun Arowolo August 23, 2016 at 12:46 PM Wonderful and interesting piece, Jan...Congrats on your well deserved win... Jan Allison August 23, 2016 at 1:07 PM Many thanks Olusegun:-) hugs Jan xx

Busani Zuma August 23, 2016 at 4:58 AM am touched and I loved it Jan Allison August 23, 2016 at 5:16 AM Thanks Busani:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong August 22, 2016 at 2:36 AM I enjoyed your senryu story set Jan! Congratulations on your second placement! 7 ; ) Jan Allison August 22, 2016 at 12:24 PM I enjoyed the challenge Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight August 21, 2016 at 5:10 PM A great 'forgiveness' example, Jan. Congratulations on your 2nd Place win. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison August 22, 2016 at 12:24 PM Thanks Sandra I'm so glad LuLoo liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman August 21, 2016 at 12:38 PM Different take on the theme Jan. A painful but sometimes necessary lesson to learn. Jan Allison August 21, 2016 at 1:10 PM Thanks so much James - growing up is tough!:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars August 21, 2016 at 10:43 AM Jan, I have been here in high school and it is not fun at all. I am glad all was forgiven in the end...congrats on your placement and thank you very much for being a part of my contest :)-luloo Jan Allison August 21, 2016 at 1:11 PM Thanks so much Luloo - in the poem it all comes good at the end that's the important thing:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso August 19, 2016 at 11:10 PM Takes 2 to tango, but forgiveness is always the best option! Great write! Jan Allison August 20, 2016 at 4:27 AM Thanks my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith August 19, 2016 at 3:55 PM Perfect picture, best wishes in the contest... Jan Allison August 19, 2016 at 4:05 PM Thanks Charlie:-) I originally said I would not use the picture feature but I do find it can enhance a poem - I occassionally post a pic to plant an idea in the reader's mind yet write about something totally different:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel August 19, 2016 at 5:47 AM Glad to know that this is fictional for you. This could be the worst deceit one could experience:( It would take a lot to forgive such a friend:) Jan Allison August 19, 2016 at 7:26 AM I wrote the poem in a way that both girls were deceived by this love rat and it brought them back together in the end - not worth losing a best friend over a boy:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell August 19, 2016 at 5:11 AM and we have a winner surely . us lads ! Jan Allison August 19, 2016 at 7:25 AM LOL:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich August 18, 2016 at 8:51 PM wow, Jan. I applaud you. I too did a personal story. But mine is shorter than yours. I think yours is better. Jan Allison August 19, 2016 at 3:03 AM This is fiction for me Andrea but I know how such events can ruin a friendship for youngsters - I'm glad mine had a positive ending:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus August 18, 2016 at 5:24 PM The romantic pain of young teenagers! At least the realization dawned on both that he was not worth fighting over! hugs // paul Jan Allison August 18, 2016 at 5:55 PM I hope there aren't too many young men like him Paul:-( hugs Jan xx

Messoh Vincent August 18, 2016 at 5:13 PM So emotional and well written.... wish you well in the contest. Jan Allison August 18, 2016 at 5:54 PM Thanks Messoh:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath August 18, 2016 at 12:43 PM Beautifully penned this poem. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Cloudy poet, bl Jan Allison August 18, 2016 at 1:56 PM Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance August 18, 2016 at 9:06 AM oh the perspective of not knowing the pain until being the one to experience. how hard relationships can be, but a nice write on forgiveness. Hugs Jan Allison August 18, 2016 at 11:27 AM Relationships especially when young can cause so many issues - glad I'm finally grown up (well almost lol) :-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie August 18, 2016 at 8:26 AM Great sentiments on a beautiful word... A terrific Senyru, that left me smiling inside.:-) Great writing...my very best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn Jan Allison August 18, 2016 at 11:28 AM Thanks for your continued support Lynn:-) hugs Jan xx