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Forest Primeval

a leisurely stroll,
walking alone in the park,
I voice deep secrets -
thoughts that I have never shared - 
with the forest primeval

verdant, sheltering,
it absorbs the unrevealed;
nature is opaque

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CayCay Jennings Date: 8/19/2025 6:13:00 PM Did a great job here. When I started at Soup a high rated poet here taught me 'truths' about haikus, truths many don't apply and that technically make their haiku wrong. Basically, no capital letters, no punctuation and third line should be a kicker, the unexpected. At the end of the 2nd line a dash or ~ is good before the kicker. You didn't ask, yet I told, hope that's ok. My Mom might say I'm being rude. I like your 'kicker'. Poetry hugs ... CayCay (I don't remember) Login to Reply CayCay Jennings Date: 8/19/2025 8:47:00 PM My bad, not called 'kicker', called ' kigo' Jim Healey Date: 8/19/2025 8:04:00 PM I don't think you're being rude at all. Glad to know that my haiku fit the proper criteria! Thanks for the positive reinforcement. I appreciate it.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/4/2025 4:26:00 PM Very nicely done. Congrats, Jim Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/4/2025 9:32:00 PM Thank you, Andrea.

I Am Anaya Date: 8/4/2025 1:10:00 PM Love that I can resonate well with your genuine thoughts of the forest (on my hiking experiences), you've captured much of what I felt, Jim. Congratulations on your placement!__Anaya Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/4/2025 9:33:00 PM Thank you, Anaya. Glad you enjoyed. Take care. Jim

Janice Canerdy Date: 8/4/2025 6:18:00 AM Jim, this is a very lovely piece. CONGRATS on your win. Janice Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/4/2025 6:20:00 AM Thank you, Janice. I appreciate your kind words. Cheers from Canada. Jim

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/4/2025 3:50:00 AM Congratulations on your winning work in the contest. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/4/2025 4:59:00 AM Thank you, Sara. Glad you enjoyed. Cheers from Canada. Jim

Paghunda Zahid Date: 8/3/2025 10:40:00 AM Congratulations on your placement Jim Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/3/2025 5:40:00 PM Thank you very much. Hope you enjoyed it. Cheers from Canada.

Oliver Mckeithan Date: 8/3/2025 10:25:00 AM Congrats on your placement in my contest Jim. I can picture myself in the woods. Too bad we didnt make it to Fundy National Park. I hear it is a wonderful place to hike Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/3/2025 10:32:00 AM Oliver, thank you very much. Can’t say I’ve been to Fundy National Park. Not in my part of Canada. But it sounds very interesting.

John Fleming Date: 8/3/2025 5:17:00 AM Excellent poetry, Jim - enjoyed your efforts! :) john Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/3/2025 6:08:00 AM Thank you John. Glad you enjoyed. Cheers from Canada. Jim

Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 8/2/2025 5:16:00 PM riveting words, Jim! Outstanding combination...one form flowed into the other beautifully! Best wishes with the contest...and enjoy your evening, Sara Login to Reply Jim Healey Date: 8/2/2025 6:06:00 PM Thank you, Sara. Glad you enjoyed. J.