For Paulie: Rip

in this silence
the respirator breathes…
we did not know
his heart
was
still




*Inspired by Brian Strand's, Indelible Impressions contest. This was written the day after my 
Step-father-in-law passed away...he passed while we were in the room.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Thomas Avatar
June 23, 2022 at 1:36 PM
I wonder how you have be doing Kristin. You were a sincere heart here. Hard to find that these days. Hope everything is okay. ~Flo
Austin Avatar
August 7, 2014 at 10:18 AM
Wonderful to hear from you. I treasure your book of poems. Sad and stark to be in the room when a person dies. I've been there a couple of times. Love, daver
Makama Avatar
January 24, 2014 at 3:41 PM
What a great poem. Its nice reading your piece once again. Keep on writing please.
A   Avatar
December 24, 2013 at 5:21 AM
Kristin, --Dropping by with SMILES and CHRISTMAS CHEERS. Thank You for making this a great year for ALL OF US. --- May magic fill your days and all your dreams come true this holiday season. MERRY CHRISTMAS <3 Love Linda -The Sweetest Poet Destroyer
A   Avatar
January 4, 2013 at 10:52 PM
nice inspiration you found.... linda
Collins Avatar
April 24, 2012 at 6:18 AM
Kristin -- You bring me back to the emergency room in which my daughter daughter died. Your writing is so inventive and full of emotion. Kathy
Austin Avatar
January 4, 2012 at 4:12 PM
Speaking of bold, daring. I wrote an epic poem called Iomindia, which is quite off the beaten track, which you might be interested in reading. It's 50 pages. Just a warning. If interested I'll e-mail it to you. Love, daver
Austin Avatar
September 21, 2011 at 4:55 PM
LOve your bold, daring, searching mind. Love, daverp
Austin Avatar
September 21, 2011 at 4:53 PM
I'm still reading your book - Waking the Dead. For me, poetry and music are so similar. The artist flows along, flows along, and every once in a while strikes gold - just a line or two, a well timed, well placed word or a few. While I don't connect with all the pieces, I feel that far too many poets are vain and ostentatious. I feel, though, your efforts are from the gut - bold, daring, searching. LOve, daver
Austin Avatar
May 9, 2011 at 8:56 AM
The "collective counscious" is what it is all about, so far as I can determine, which is very little. The idea that all - ALL - is interrelated makes sense. I take it beyond the Earth and Stars, and into other dimensions. the "Go into your closet" thing. If I think too much about infinity I get weird. The complexity is beyond anything. Love, daver
Austin Avatar
May 9, 2011 at 7:20 AM
You can stretch the rubber band just so far then it snaps back. I pray for a reversal of things, but not Armageddon. Education seems to be the answer, yet education is getting too expensive for most people on this earth. People can change things if they will, but I am afraid they won't. "Waking the Dead' seems an impossibility. Keep in touch. Love, daver
Austin Avatar
May 9, 2011 at 7:14 AM
Hi, Kristin, I've been wanting to write and tell you how much I enjoy your book of poetry - Waking the Dead - I won't B.S. There are a great many poems I can't figure out, and I am lazy about too many rereads, but the ones I can identify with are superb. You really are special. As for predictions - the society we live in is, to me, getting completely upside-down. Our value system is horrid. LOve, daver
Stella Avatar
September 18, 2010 at 12:14 PM
like my mom I seen her eyes roll in the back of her head and just knew the angels came and swooped her up to be with my dad and her parents and siblings such sad imagery hope all is well with ya hun I know its been awhile I am also fighting deamon within but I am goign to win the fight keep up the great work and hope to see ya agin in soupland
Smalling Avatar
September 8, 2010 at 9:34 AM
Death has never been more vividly portrayed on the canvas of our mortality, this powerful poem consumes my sympathy
Anderson Avatar
August 31, 2010 at 9:57 AM
Accept my sympathy. Thanks for the comments on my write. ...Good job, ...JA
Iyer Avatar
June 4, 2010 at 10:10 AM
Sorry for your loss You have captured your sense of loss very nicely brought out God Bless, Suresh
Brown Avatar
June 1, 2010 at 12:10 PM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Kristin. May you have many more. Love, Carol
Jordan Avatar
May 31, 2010 at 5:12 PM
Kristin, I'm so sorry for your loss - I realize this may have been written long ago but I also know from experience some pains never die - my prayers are with you hon - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week, YF4L -God Bless, MJ
Fisher Avatar
May 31, 2010 at 10:35 AM
Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette
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May 30, 2010 at 1:30 PM
Nice dedication. So much captured in this concise poem. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Hope things are well with you. You are missed at The Soup. Karen
Foulk Avatar
February 27, 2010 at 1:47 PM
a heart felt piece that really touched me.
Hickman Avatar
February 20, 2010 at 1:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this deeply emotional write,,loss of loved ones are desperately contained at times,I lost my grandmother and father and mother all in a three year period of deep emotion I lived for several years,,,Blessings..Cecil
Nelson Avatar
December 17, 2009 at 11:00 PM
wow, true life on paper, you can sense the drama in the word choice
Strand Avatar
November 29, 2009 at 11:48 PM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest Kristin.Rgds Brian
P Avatar
November 18, 2009 at 6:52 AM
Listening To Your poetry 4real..
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