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For Here We Die

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Rejoice, unknown of waking fall
Apart this longish bramble path
For lest we stand ‘bove lowered feel
And lone of echo’s loudest call
Of whisperings we shan’t conceal
Despised this threatened aftermath
Now formed of cost and promised wrath
If only but to heed the charge
These observations kept at large
Neath thundercloud and pouring rain
A prequel to the coming pain
Unkempt in true ballistic rage
Through iron bars and bolted cage
Lost memories we soon engage
In jest, we conquer phantom dreams
As rivers drown in roaring streams
With night a fantasy to spill
And mouths of babes we come to fill
For here we die in darkened form
When crying tears we’d soon forget
Submerged within the caustic storm
Alone with every found regret

12/30/19

Written for the: Strict rhyme and meter challenge Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Son Of Spock
Rhyme scheme: ABCACBBDDEEFFFGGHHIJIJ

Copyright © Chris Green | Year Posted 2019

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Eve Roper Date: 2/5/2020 9:32:00 PM Amazing, Chris, congratulation on your win. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 2/6/2020 7:31:00 AM Thank you so very much Eve.

John Hamilton Date: 1/31/2020 1:10:00 PM What an excellent write Chris a worthy winner, I like this kind of offering from you, it truly shows your depth of understanding and executing flawlessly great poetry. Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 1/31/2020 1:21:00 PM Thanks john. This was a difficult one for me, I am happy you enjoyed it.

Craig Cornish Date: 1/28/2020 2:41:00 PM A particularly special write Chris - so much depth of thought not easily consumed in one reading, nor a few and worthy of many - proof that tradition is live and well. Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 1/28/2020 3:29:00 PM Thank you so much Craig. I appreciate your kind comment and am humbled by your thoughts.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/27/2020 7:57:00 PM Your poetry is always a joy to read and lingers in the mind Chris. This is a really gorgeous poem and deserving of your high placement my friend! Congratulations! xxoo Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 1/28/2020 7:34:00 AM Thank you Connie. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one and appreciate your nice comments always.

Sandra Adams Date: 1/27/2020 6:23:00 PM so glad to see this one up in a nice position on the winner's list... even your dark poetry is written exquisitely ... congratulations Chris :) hugs Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 1/28/2020 7:34:00 AM Thank you so very much Sandy for your kind words. I appreciate you my friend

Wendy Watson Date: 1/27/2020 1:42:00 PM Chris, this had a touch of Shakespeare to me and I could almost hear Richard Burton voicing the lines with his famous rich, Welsh lilt. I thought it was fantastic! Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 1/27/2020 2:22:00 PM Thank you so very much Wendy for your kind and humbling words. Richard Burton or Peter O'Toole, wow that would be really cool. That made me smile. Thank you again...your comment is greatly appreciated.

Hello There Date: 1/6/2020 1:59:00 PM Intriguing piece, my friend. I think SoS will love this creative pen!! Good luck :) Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 1/6/2020 2:25:00 PM I'm not too sure about that but I am glad you liked it. :)

Gershon Wolf Date: 12/31/2019 5:14:00 PM Strictly rhymed, metered and messaged both within and without the strictures. Deeply affecting, O Poet! Thank you, Gershon Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 12/31/2019 5:20:00 PM Thank you my friend. I am glad you liked this one. I appreciate you Gershon. Happy New Year my friend.

Ronald D Thompson Date: 12/30/2019 3:59:00 PM Excellent Chris. Truly crafted with precision and wonderful phrasing. All the best...Ron :) Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 12/30/2019 4:27:00 PM Thanks so much Ron. I appreciate your visit today.

Susan Woodrow Date: 12/30/2019 1:59:00 PM wow, you have upstaged Sylvia Plath in her darkness but with rhyme and meter which is of course, a cut above..especially because the rhyme schemata is made up by some weirdo Vulcan! hehe All I can say, is painkillers and more painkillers...there's all kinds to be found and not necessarily pill or liquid form :) Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 12/30/2019 2:08:00 PM I am just hoping it is logical, because you know how those whiny Vulcans are. Live long and prosper my friend. :) Thank you Susan.

Sandra Adams Date: 12/30/2019 1:43:00 PM brilliantly crafted Chris...i think you did a wonderful job with the rhyme scheme...i just peeked in on the contest...i don't know that i could write one for that contest's guidelines but you did rather well... best wishes in the contest... hugs Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 12/30/2019 2:06:00 PM Thank you Sandy and I am sure if you sat down and thought about it, you could pen one that would peak at the top of this contest. That is just how talented I find you to be. I appreciate you my friend.