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Has she been sleep walking all her life? Or has her frustrated volition taken the upper hand And determined what she should remember Or what she should best forget? What was their life like, when as children They loved to race each other in muddy fields, Leaving their footprints in the wet clay? There, his strides were deeper than hers For he was stout, and she was thin. But as time passed the length of each heavy step got shorter, Their days grew lonelier and lonelier. Until in the muddy field there was but one set of strides. Then the rains came And wiped all footprints from the field of mud. 30 April 2021 Placed 2

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Date: 5/8/2021 5:55:00 PM
Congratulations, Victor, on your win with this poignant poem. It's beautiful, and touching - remind wiped footprints in our life. I would be very much interested to read your Nightingale poem. BW ~ Mala
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Date: 5/5/2021 12:06:00 PM
Very poignant and melancholy Victor remembering the lost footsteps of treasured ones who longer walk with us. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 5/4/2021 10:43:00 AM
Beautiful!
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Date: 5/4/2021 9:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful story/write. I really enjoyed it. Have a blessed day...................
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Date: 5/4/2021 7:41:00 AM
Our journeys through life are fleeting and at some point we may lose the companions on whom we rely. You did a remarkable job of describing our journeys and the way time and nature eradicate the marks we left behind. There were many extraordinary poems in this contest. Congratulations on a well-deserved win! And thank you for supporting the contest. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 5/1/2021 6:21:00 AM
Very strong imagery Victor ~ I can feel the sadness within your words. With kindest thoughts Ann xx wks
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Date: 5/1/2021 4:06:00 AM
Emotive and expressive work. A good use of metaphors. I feel the pain in the work. Thanks for your visits. Sara
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Date: 4/30/2021 7:52:00 PM
There is an untold story here of childhood friends who played and raced through the fields. As they grew older the footprints became just one set and then even that set disappeared. A bitter sweet end to the story. Well done. God Bless, JB
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Date: 4/30/2021 7:51:00 PM
Seems that life is full of change, and memories of the people we once knew. I love your brilliant portrayal of this loss as vanishing footsteps, Victor. :)
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Date: 4/30/2021 5:15:00 PM
Very good work for footprints and I like how you put them in mud. Very creative thinking, Victor.
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Date: 4/30/2021 3:00:00 PM
You are so good at writing, this is really a winner. So many years pass and like us our loved ones leave living us to wait to see them again. Hugs
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Date: 4/30/2021 11:46:00 AM
thought provoking piece Victor, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/30/2021 7:11:00 AM
Victor, I like this poem, a good piece about aging and loss.
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Date: 4/30/2021 6:55:00 AM
One of your most beautiful poems yet Victor. The imagery is sharp , and every word brings us to the understanding of the soul who wrote this. Thank you for sharing, your talent never ends. :)
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Date: 4/30/2021 6:28:00 AM
WoW! Victor, What a well written thought-provoking entry for the contest. I found it to be sad yet it gave your reader much to ponder. It looks like a great contender for the contest. Best wishes in the in the contest.Have a great day and weekend my friend- Alexis
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Date: 4/30/2021 5:22:00 AM
A story brilliantly told as always --this one dwells in saddened memories. Much depth to your metaphoric ending, Victor.
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Date: 4/30/2021 5:18:00 AM
An intriguing write Victor, best wishes
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Date: 4/30/2021 4:23:00 AM
Wow! This one is fantastic! A fave for me! Hugs-a-million!
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Date: 4/30/2021 2:41:00 AM
Superb write, Victor! A path we all tread, a fate we all dread
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Date: 4/30/2021 2:13:00 AM
I suppose with the passing of time all traces of our existence will be washed away. Tom
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Date: 4/30/2021 2:08:00 AM
So sad is that one’s footprints don’t last, what was, what’s been, never again to be heard or seen. Eloquently written Victor ... Belle
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Date: 4/30/2021 1:09:00 AM
Thought provoking write on the footprints of life:)
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