Robert Warlov Poet Rhyme

Foolish Flower

Always tried to do my best
still - not much earth blest
of five children one 

alone makes me grand
Too foolish in the flower
God chaffs the plan in

love's forgotten-hour
light fails star-bud blooms-
A Promised Place

a table set
in brighter rooms
beyond regret



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Note:

(In mashing a "normal" poem through a Haiku sieve, I had no conception of "star buds". It happened when I jammed together the thematic elements, lines and rhymes.  It was like a bar-fight with my sub-conscience and that's the bloody tooth it spat-out.   - R.W)

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Andrea Dietrich January 17, 2018 at 8:57 PM in loves forgotten hour light fails star-bud blooms That was the part that really caught my attention , and after I copied it, I then finished the poem and saw that you had made note of it at the end!! Awesome!! Robert Warlov January 17, 2018 at 9:43 PM I decided to write first and then abstract into a Haiku form, but I have no discipline. When I saw that line, I thought; 'What... I didn't write that'? --- My new Spooky Form.

Andrea Dietrich January 17, 2018 at 8:54 PM Robert, on the remark you made on my poem, I so agree with you. I had to look up other of the words in that contest just to be sure I knew what they all meant. haha. Let me see your poem now. Robert Warlov January 17, 2018 at 9:11 PM My poem? What poem?-- I used "Clowder" and "cerebrate" in the updated "Refrigerator Notes..." - If I look up words I get stuck. Been caught literally reading the dictionary. Like doing algebra for fun.