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Poem written for and submitted to “Pentastitch It” poetry contest, Nette Onclaud, sponsor, October 26, 2025.

FOG OF MIDNIGHT

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silence thick 
smothers midnight’s breath
shapes shift slow, unseen
streetlight hums wordless bisque hymns
bus brakes sigh 

bus halts, waits 
exhaust fumes taste sharp 
wipers thwick-thwack-thwoc 
blades clearing what eyes can not
squeak. blink. gone.

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Line Gauthier October 29, 2025 at 1:29 PM Great title for what follows ~ lol sara Etgen-Baker October 31, 2025 at 5:29 AM many thanks!

Sotto Poet October 27, 2025 at 10:28 AM Bravo, Sara. A moment of remarkable brilliance you have conjured. Unexpected, when the mist descends, a shroud of uncertainty, yet within the confines of the bus, a semblance of security, or perhaps not, vividly portrayed. sara Etgen-Baker October 28, 2025 at 4:01 PM wow, thank you, kind Sotto, for the 'bravo' and for the round of applause you offered in your comments. I always find your comments meaningful and a joy to read....color me grateful, Texas hugs, Sara

Eve Roper October 27, 2025 at 8:27 AM Well done, Sara. You’ve created a fantastic scene. Andrea is right, the last two lines are powerful sara Etgen-Baker October 28, 2025 at 4:00 PM thank you, Eve! Your visit and comments mean a great deal to me! wishing you a pleasant evening, hugs, Sara

Andrea Dietrich October 27, 2025 at 12:12 AM Those last two lines sure are powerful sara Etgen-Baker October 27, 2025 at 5:18 AM many thanks, Andrea

Valsa George October 26, 2025 at 10:44 PM Dear Sara, how beautifully and powerfully you have delineated the midnight fog... a curse to people driving. All the best in the contest. sara Etgen-Baker October 27, 2025 at 5:19 AM you're most kind, dear Valsa...thanks for your wishes and comments, hugs, Sara

Mystic Rose Rose October 26, 2025 at 6:42 PM eerie when the fog settles in, in an feel safe in a bus or not, nicely described Sara sara Etgen-Baker October 27, 2025 at 5:19 AM thank you, sweet Rose!

Paige Hind October 26, 2025 at 5:43 PM AMAZING a fav sara Etgen-Baker October 26, 2025 at 5:56 PM awww, thank you! appreciate the fav