Fog

The eerie fog enshrouded all. It conquered my vision, with it's menacing creep. It rolled in so dense, so self contained. My imagination, ran wildly in this thick mist. Just when, I though it abated It consumed me again. Gravitating me to the spot move I could not. Like a master of illusion Things appeared and disappeared from my sight. Moving slowly, catching glimpses as it opened a window for me.

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Jack Horne

Date: 7/29/2011 10:50:00 AM

I love this one, Phyllis - so atmospheric. I often miss contest results, but I hope this one was a winner if you wrote it for a comp.

Judy Ball

Date: 7/20/2011 10:32:00 AM

Sounds like me trying to drive through an early morbing fog. Creep, creep, creep for fear of hitting something. God Bless, JB

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/29/2011 12:13:00 PM

wow, you sure described the fog so well here, very creepy- really enjoyed this Phyl :) and thank you so much for your kind & inspiring comments in my poems, I am doing good, thank you for being such a sweet friend :) and happy music listening :) enjoy your day :) hugs

James Foulk

Date: 5/27/2011 12:47:00 PM

ooo, can just see the fog now as i close my eyes, but wait how can i have my eyes closed if i am typing, good question, i can't. but you know what i mean. this was great piece of art the you created, enjoyed it.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/25/2011 10:07:00 PM

Eerie, just like that fog, Phyllis. Did you just encounter a foggy day? Sorry about your sore throat. What a bummer. Hope everything else is going ok?

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/24/2011 3:55:00 PM

Nice take on the Fog, Phyllis

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/24/2011 11:02:00 AM

I like the air of mystery in the mist of fog, Phyllis. Especially love the last line because it's so hard to drive through fog. Have you ever read Carl Sandburg's poem "Fog"? Enjoyed your poem! Love, Carolyn (BTW - it appears this poem was posted three times -- probably when you were getting error messages from the Soup. They're so frustrating!)

Stephan McBride

Date: 5/23/2011 6:54:00 PM

I loved it , amazing detail it put me in the fog, thanks so much for your comments I really am greatful, I give God all the credit ,take care God bless you

Cj Krieger

Date: 5/23/2011 2:40:00 PM

Very nicely written, although I felt (at the very end) that it was not complete... but I liked it!