Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Florida Nature

Blending in so beautifully in the endless everglades
The heron waits patiently

The warm wind ripples the water
He waits regally

Standing still like a statue in silent blue waters
He waits hungrily

Catching his first fish of the day
No more waiting - he dines like a king 


Inspired by Majestic Pose
3~11~15
Contest  Florida Nature never judges

Submitted to Premiere Contest #13 sponsored by Skat

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Maurice Yvonne March 12, 2015 at 1:42 PM Brilliant write Jan, I love it. Jan Allison March 12, 2015 at 1:43 PM Thanks Armand - I simply can't stop smiling seeing you back and commenting:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus March 12, 2015 at 11:30 AM You do this visual justice, Jan....very serene. Love the repetition, it brings out the desired effect. Hugs // paul Jan Allison March 12, 2015 at 11:35 AM Thanks Paul for your lovely comment - I thought I should work more on the poem but will leave it as it is now :-) Hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 12, 2015 at 8:04 AM beautiful imagery plus beautiful words.. :)! God bless you always sweet Jan.. :)...olive eloisa Jan Allison March 12, 2015 at 8:13 AM Thanks so much for dropping by Olive:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso March 11, 2015 at 8:46 PM So beautiful! Hugs Jan Allison March 12, 2015 at 5:22 AM Aww thanks Arthur:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer March 11, 2015 at 6:41 PM i love the repetition you've used here, jan - it's very effective! Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 6:45 PM Thanks Ilene - I wrote it before dad died - I thought I would expand on it but have left it as it was:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich March 11, 2015 at 6:22 PM I was thinking you chose some kind of a new form that repeated the way the heron waited. I just love patterns in one's stanzas. Great ending on it. well, I am DONE and gotta get home to Joe now. See ya, jan. Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 6:27 PM Thanks Andrea I do apprecaite your feedback - I couldn't post it as couplets as it doesn't rhyme so went with free verse:-) Hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis March 11, 2015 at 3:48 PM Having been there I could state that the image is perfect as well as the verse dear, Jan! Good luck! Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 3:53 PM Thank you SO much Demetrios! Hugs Jan xx

William Gray March 11, 2015 at 3:41 PM Lovely piece Jan!. Best Wishes my friend!. Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 3:43 PM Thanks so much for dropping by William:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud March 11, 2015 at 3:04 PM how graceful is your work, jan.. so pleasing!.. huggs Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 3:10 PM Thanks Nette I am not 100 happy with it yet - I will improve it if I have time:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet March 11, 2015 at 1:03 PM If it wasn't for souls like yourself we wouldn’t have the eyes see such beauty in nature. Emile. #7 Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 1:13 PM Thank you for your kind words Emile - I think I could work further on the poem I wrote it before dad died just got round to posting it - may alter it a bit if I have time and inclination:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nicole Ussery March 11, 2015 at 8:39 AM The poem is smooth,not to rough.It tells a story behind the words of you.Shall your poems stay in mind. Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 8:46 AM Thanks so much Nicole for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance March 11, 2015 at 8:16 AM I like it! :) Jan Allison March 11, 2015 at 8:17 AM Thanks Cas - I have given the contest a go that's the main thing:-) Hugs Jan xx