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Fleeting Rainstorm

Stormy winds swing canopies of trees Swaying dark shadows upon my reverie Glimmering through forest-green leaves Sunlight filtered by cumulous clouds As raindrops pitter-patter on sidewalk Drenching instincts ambling in the park. Sun-rays soon flicker, as rain-clouds part Spreading golden dust on cobalt-blue sky Intermittently oscillating light and dark Floating breezy patterns on emerald grass. The multi-hued sky then picks up my vibes As charming horizon evokes your smile. The voice I hear, speaks to me so softly First time ever, it greets me with a kiss Holding my posture, I sprint for a glimpse. But there's no one, for no one there was Except the chatter of agitated bird calls Warning of danger from a lone stranger Conjuring daydreams in fleeting rainstorm. August 26, 2018 Placed first--End of August standard contest by Brian Strand

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/21/2024 8:16:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Thank you for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Angela Crabtree

Date: 12/20/2020 3:13:00 PM

Beautifully written, Vijay. My favorite line "Floating breezy patterns on emerald grass.". Have a great week :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/19/2019 9:37:00 PM

Your poem sings of nature in the best of light Vijay. I love this beauty! : ) xxoo

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/24/2019 12:53:00 PM

Hi Vijay, I went back on your page to the exact date (well plus minus a day or two) that i joined poetry soup. It has been and continues to be a wondrous journey with special friends I have made along the way, and you Vijay, are a special friend. This poem is incredible as are all of your poems! Blessings Vijay, Jennifer.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/13/2018 4:07:00 AM

Much belated congratulations on your win in the contest Vijay, Much deserved with this awesome write. Hi Vijay, I so easily found myself at the heart of your images, I could so easily feel the angel's tears upon my skin, looking up at a lively, cloudy sky. As the storm broke it was so easy to see the sky clear. Wonderful content on another excellent write my friend. May your pen ever run gold. A fave. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2018 8:42:00 AM

Your generous feedback is much appreciated..many many thanks my friend.

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/3/2018 5:54:00 PM

Congratulations for your excellent win Vijay :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/4/2018 9:12:00 AM

Thank you Heidi.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/1/2018 7:12:00 PM

happy weekend, vijay... are you somewhere else of late?.. huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/2/2018 8:08:00 AM

I am in town..writing and editing always..it never ends. Thanks for asking, nette.

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/1/2018 3:42:00 PM

Hello Vijay, Congratulations on your "Win" here!! The flow of the verses and the imagery you employed in this free verse are most excellent. (And thanks too, for your read of my most recent poem on Senator McCain.) I always enjoy your poetry!! Keep writing and having fun!! Excellent Work!! Cheers, Gary

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/2/2018 8:06:00 AM

Thank for the visit and feedback..I am always happy to read your comments.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 9/1/2018 2:06:00 PM

What a wonderful tribute to a fleeting rainstorm - the kind I most enjoy when I'm safely tucked in bed listening to rain falling on the roof top as I blissfully drift off to sleep! Lovely imagery and lyrical lines that are so enjoyable to read! Congratulations on your win! Well-deserved! Hugs. Pandita

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2018 2:45:00 PM

You are very generous with your comments..many thanks Pandita, for your kind feedback.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 9/1/2018 2:05:00 PM

I love everything about the rain!! If I close my eyes, I can feel the waters touch, the wind creating moments upon my skin. I even love a playful thunderstorm. Very exciting indeed. Your thoughts hold many emotions. I see that you have won in a contest. Congratulations. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2018 2:44:00 PM

Thank you Brandy..I appreciate your visit and thoughtful feedback.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/1/2018 1:28:00 PM

I'm back to say CONGRATS, Vijay! Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2018 2:42:00 PM

Thank you Janice.

Roy Pett

Date: 9/1/2018 9:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Vijay with your beautifully written poem. :))

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2018 1:04:00 PM

Thank you Roy.

Joseph May

Date: 9/1/2018 7:47:00 AM

Congrats on your win Vijay..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2018 9:06:00 AM

Thank you Joseph.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

Date: 9/1/2018 4:29:00 AM

Nature so harsh at the same time so calm and beautiful.A wondeful descrption of the faces of nature that we experience in our lives.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2018 9:06:00 AM

Thank you Akham.

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/30/2018 7:30:00 PM

Exceptional poem obviously composed by a wonderful poet that sees the treasures in rainbows, the glory in stars and the truth embraced to be given by a pure and poetic heart.. A fav my good friend..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/31/2018 8:44:00 AM

Thank you my good friend..your visit and comments are much appreciated.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/30/2018 6:35:00 PM

the mellow mood and tempo of your poem enchant, vijay ... one of my faves...huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/31/2018 8:43:00 AM

Thank you nette.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/30/2018 6:03:00 PM

I like the air of mystery you've given the rainstorm with your vivid descriptions, Vijay! Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/31/2018 8:43:00 AM

Thank you Janice--appreciate the feedback.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/30/2018 6:03:00 PM

I like the air of mystery you've given the rainstorm with your vivid descriptions, Vijay! Janice

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/30/2018 12:37:00 PM

Brilliant depiction of a rainstorm; they set my imagination flying, too.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/31/2018 8:42:00 AM

Thank you for your generous feedback M.L.K.

Joseph May

Date: 8/30/2018 8:10:00 AM

You weave your words through the clouds as you "conjure daydreams in a fleeting rainstorm".. Great write Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/30/2018 8:30:00 AM

Thank you Joseph.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/30/2018 1:53:00 AM

A dangerous stranger, very beautifully carved words, Vijay:)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/30/2018 8:29:00 AM

Thank you Jo.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 8/29/2018 5:38:00 PM

Very cryptic cool poem, VJ! I agree totally w/Mike ... your words have such elegant depth of emotions. Beautiful prose, as per usual from your golden pen, my friend. Love and joy always.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/30/2018 8:28:00 AM

Thank you Freddie--I appreciate your visit and kind feedback, my friend.

Mike Gentile

Date: 8/29/2018 12:13:00 PM

As always Vijay, you manage to capture such feeling with your exquisite words. Such sad daydreams !! Well Done

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/30/2018 8:27:00 AM

Thank you Mike.

Manmath Dalei

Date: 8/28/2018 8:21:00 PM

Well penned. So many nice concepts are there like..... Sunlight filtered, spreading golden dust in sky etc. I really enjoyed....... With love//Manmath

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/29/2018 7:11:00 AM

Thank you Manmath.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/27/2018 11:53:00 AM

ohh, vijay, a radiant display of poetic contrast well crafted... i enjoyed the twist in the end...huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/27/2018 3:19:00 PM

Thank you for the generous feedback, nette. Your comments are much appreciated.