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Fleeting Rainstorm

Stormy winds swing canopies of trees 
Swaying dark shadows upon my reverie
Glimmering through forest-green leaves 
Sunlight filtered by cumulous clouds

As raindrops pitter-patter on sidewalk
Drenching instincts ambling in the park.

Sun-rays soon flicker, as rain-clouds part
Spreading golden dust on cobalt-blue sky
Intermittently oscillating light and dark
Floating breezy patterns on emerald grass.

The multi-hued sky then picks up my vibes
As charming horizon evokes your smile.

The voice I hear, speaks to me so softly
First time ever, it greets me with a kiss
Holding my posture, I sprint for a glimpse.

But there's no one, for no one there was
Except the chatter of agitated bird calls
Warning of danger from a lone stranger
Conjuring daydreams in fleeting rainstorm.

August 26, 2018
Placed first--End of August standard contest by Brian Strand

Copyright © Vijay Pandit | Year Posted 2018

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Sara Kendrick Date: 2/21/2024 8:16:00 AM Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Thank you for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K Login to Reply

Angela Crabtree Date: 12/20/2020 3:13:00 PM Beautifully written, Vijay. My favorite line "Floating breezy patterns on emerald grass.". Have a great week :) Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/19/2019 9:37:00 PM Your poem sings of nature in the best of light Vijay. I love this beauty! : ) xxoo Login to Reply

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 5/24/2019 12:53:00 PM Hi Vijay, I went back on your page to the exact date (well plus minus a day or two) that i joined poetry soup. It has been and continues to be a wondrous journey with special friends I have made along the way, and you Vijay, are a special friend. This poem is incredible as are all of your poems! Blessings Vijay, Jennifer. Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 10/13/2018 4:07:00 AM Much belated congratulations on your win in the contest Vijay, Much deserved with this awesome write. Hi Vijay, I so easily found myself at the heart of your images, I could so easily feel the angel's tears upon my skin, looking up at a lively, cloudy sky. As the storm broke it was so easy to see the sky clear. Wonderful content on another excellent write my friend. May your pen ever run gold. A fave. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 10/16/2018 8:42:00 AM Your generous feedback is much appreciated..many many thanks my friend.

Heidi Sands Date: 9/3/2018 5:54:00 PM Congratulations for your excellent win Vijay :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/4/2018 9:12:00 AM Thank you Heidi.

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/1/2018 7:12:00 PM happy weekend, vijay... are you somewhere else of late?.. huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/2/2018 8:08:00 AM I am in town..writing and editing always..it never ends. Thanks for asking, nette.

Gary Bateman Date: 9/1/2018 3:42:00 PM Hello Vijay, Congratulations on your "Win" here!! The flow of the verses and the imagery you employed in this free verse are most excellent. (And thanks too, for your read of my most recent poem on Senator McCain.) I always enjoy your poetry!! Keep writing and having fun!! Excellent Work!! Cheers, Gary Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/2/2018 8:06:00 AM Thank for the visit and feedback..I am always happy to read your comments.

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 9/1/2018 2:06:00 PM What a wonderful tribute to a fleeting rainstorm - the kind I most enjoy when I'm safely tucked in bed listening to rain falling on the roof top as I blissfully drift off to sleep! Lovely imagery and lyrical lines that are so enjoyable to read! Congratulations on your win! Well-deserved! Hugs. Pandita Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/1/2018 2:45:00 PM You are very generous with your comments..many thanks Pandita, for your kind feedback.

Brandy Nicole Date: 9/1/2018 2:05:00 PM I love everything about the rain!! If I close my eyes, I can feel the waters touch, the wind creating moments upon my skin. I even love a playful thunderstorm. Very exciting indeed. Your thoughts hold many emotions. I see that you have won in a contest. Congratulations. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/1/2018 2:44:00 PM Thank you Brandy..I appreciate your visit and thoughtful feedback.

Janice Canerdy Date: 9/1/2018 1:28:00 PM I'm back to say CONGRATS, Vijay! Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/1/2018 2:42:00 PM Thank you Janice.

Roy Pett Date: 9/1/2018 9:10:00 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win Vijay with your beautifully written poem. :)) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/1/2018 1:04:00 PM Thank you Roy.

Joseph May Date: 9/1/2018 7:47:00 AM Congrats on your win Vijay.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/1/2018 9:06:00 AM Thank you Joseph.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh Date: 9/1/2018 4:29:00 AM Nature so harsh at the same time so calm and beautiful.A wondeful descrption of the faces of nature that we experience in our lives. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 9/1/2018 9:06:00 AM Thank you Akham.

Robert Lindley Date: 8/30/2018 7:30:00 PM Exceptional poem obviously composed by a wonderful poet that sees the treasures in rainbows, the glory in stars and the truth embraced to be given by a pure and poetic heart.. A fav my good friend.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/31/2018 8:44:00 AM Thank you my good friend..your visit and comments are much appreciated.

Nette Onclaud Date: 8/30/2018 6:35:00 PM the mellow mood and tempo of your poem enchant, vijay ... one of my faves...huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/31/2018 8:43:00 AM Thank you nette.

Janice Canerdy Date: 8/30/2018 6:03:00 PM I like the air of mystery you've given the rainstorm with your vivid descriptions, Vijay! Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/31/2018 8:43:00 AM Thank you Janice--appreciate the feedback.

Janice Canerdy Date: 8/30/2018 6:03:00 PM I like the air of mystery you've given the rainstorm with your vivid descriptions, Vijay! Janice Login to Reply

M. L. Kiser Date: 8/30/2018 12:37:00 PM Brilliant depiction of a rainstorm; they set my imagination flying, too. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/31/2018 8:42:00 AM Thank you for your generous feedback M.L.K.

Joseph May Date: 8/30/2018 8:10:00 AM You weave your words through the clouds as you "conjure daydreams in a fleeting rainstorm".. Great write Vijay Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/30/2018 8:30:00 AM Thank you Joseph.

Joanna Daniel Date: 8/30/2018 1:53:00 AM A dangerous stranger, very beautifully carved words, Vijay:) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/30/2018 8:29:00 AM Thank you Jo.

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 8/29/2018 5:38:00 PM Very cryptic cool poem, VJ! I agree totally w/Mike ... your words have such elegant depth of emotions. Beautiful prose, as per usual from your golden pen, my friend. Love and joy always. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/30/2018 8:28:00 AM Thank you Freddie--I appreciate your visit and kind feedback, my friend.

Mike Gentile Date: 8/29/2018 12:13:00 PM As always Vijay, you manage to capture such feeling with your exquisite words. Such sad daydreams !! Well Done Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/30/2018 8:27:00 AM Thank you Mike.

Manmath Dalei Date: 8/28/2018 8:21:00 PM Well penned. So many nice concepts are there like..... Sunlight filtered, spreading golden dust in sky etc. I really enjoyed....... With love//Manmath Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/29/2018 7:11:00 AM Thank you Manmath.

Nette Onclaud Date: 8/27/2018 11:53:00 AM ohh, vijay, a radiant display of poetic contrast well crafted... i enjoyed the twist in the end...huggs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 8/27/2018 3:19:00 PM Thank you for the generous feedback, nette. Your comments are much appreciated.

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