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Fledgling Crash Lands On Its Maiden Flight

Delight...
First flight

From nest
Tries best

Hits tree
Dear me!

Bent beak
Loud squeak

Throbbin
Robin

11-29-17

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2017

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December 2, 2017 at 9:35 AM

Excellent stuff, Jan! Most amusing! All the best, John.

December 2, 2017 at 4:52 PM

Thanks so much John:-) hugs jan xx

December 1, 2017 at 5:46 AM

I've seen this actually happen, you described it well Hugs

December 2, 2017 at 4:51 PM

aww bless:-( hugs jan xx

November 30, 2017 at 1:27 PM

Footles with an "L" sign attached, but definitely not referring to the author:) Now I'm feeling sorry for little robin! Incidentally, I found an injured robin in my garden this morning...died in my hands:( Hugs // paul

December 2, 2017 at 4:50 PM

aww sorry you can relate to this for real:-( hugs jan xx

November 30, 2017 at 11:18 AM

Very funny - love it, Jan!

December 2, 2017 at 4:50 PM

Thanks Agnes:-) hugs jan xx

November 30, 2017 at 5:41 AM

This is really good...A lesson for all...in a little story...All the best Jan

December 2, 2017 at 4:50 PM

Thanks Arturo:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

November 30, 2017 at 4:16 AM

- A hard school to learn to fly :) - Love it, Jan :) - Best wishes for a lovely day :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

December 2, 2017 at 4:48 PM

Yes its sad to see when they are not quite ready:-( hugs jan xx

November 29, 2017 at 8:25 PM

So funny especially that last verse!

December 2, 2017 at 4:46 PM

Cheers Arthur:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

November 29, 2017 at 7:57 PM

oh Jan, that one just got funnier and funnier. The last few were awesome!

December 2, 2017 at 4:46 PM

I never know where my muse will take me lol:-) hugs jan xx

November 29, 2017 at 7:41 PM

nice one, Jan, hugs eve

December 2, 2017 at 4:45 PM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

November 29, 2017 at 3:36 PM

Poor birdie! Very cute. As usual.

November 29, 2017 at 5:01 PM

cheers ma dear and your avatar is so cute too:-0 hugs Jan xx

November 29, 2017 at 2:03 PM

I Have the perfect picture have the perfect picture in my head! Excellent!

November 29, 2017 at 5:00 PM

Thanks so much Anna:-) hugs jan xx

November 29, 2017 at 2:03 PM

Very well done Jan...soupmail

November 29, 2017 at 5:00 PM

Sorry for the delay, have just replied:-) hugs jan xx

Barry Stebbings

November 29, 2017 at 1:08 PM

Ha, ha, ha. NIce one Jan. Mistake/head ache...wings/sting...next flight/get right. // Barry

November 29, 2017 at 4:59 PM

lovely footles Barry!:-) hugs Jan xx

November 29, 2017 at 12:30 PM

I enjoy your footless, Jan, nicely done. John

November 29, 2017 at 4:59 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

November 29, 2017 at 12:16 PM

Adorable, Jan.

November 29, 2017 at 12:28 PM

Thanks Line I was inspired by a I'd in the garden not a fledgling but it needed a refresher on flying poor thing:-) hugs Jan xx

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