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Flat Tire

I was rolling along
just fine, thank you
until I came across you

Like a nail in the road, you poked a vicious
hole in my heart, and I went flat

And it was a rough ride
for a while there
and noisy, too-
ka-WHUMP
ka-WHUMP
ka-WHUMP
my heart pathetically
loped along
hoping you would return
to fill the hole you’d made

But now, it’s through, I’m over you
I have a brand new heart
and a much more
careful driver
at the wheel

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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 9/6/2018 12:16:00 PM

I love it! Fabulously deployed metaphor ;) xomo

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 9/6/2018 11:35:00 PM

Thank you so much! :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/6/2018 4:22:00 AM

It seems sad to me that it often takes a much more careful driver before we can get over the puncture in the heart, but this is precisely what happens. Nice one, Rhona. I love it!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 9/6/2018 11:34:00 PM

Thank you! And yes, you know this was written from experience...