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The meter of this poem is Imabic Pentameter / Cateletic.

Cateletic = The end syllable or word is the final "beat" of the line.

Acateletic = has an unaccented end syllable or word that doesn't

alter the meter of the poem.

If sorrow cloaks the surface of your soul And chills the warmth that turns your wishes cold, Unchain the hidden anguish in your hold, Releasing tethered truths that must be told. Your clever wisdom, once conceived as real, So blinded you to feelings kept concealed. Inducement starts when you at last repeal The law you self imposed, a false ideal. Beginning chapter one you sense a start. Ahead we veer, adjust and reembark. In time the doubts will pass, from our concern, Devotion grows in knowledge two must learn. A flaming passion, uncontrolled, will die. Insightful ones will dodge the seering light. The quantity is not where truth abides, The quality is where forever lies. Gene Bourne 08-15-14 .

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Date: 9/8/2015 2:12:00 PM
Gene, Congratulations on having your poem featured on the home page. **SKAT**
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Date: 9/3/2014 4:53:00 AM
Keep those embers burning..Enjoyed reading your work this morn..Thanks for the visit to my page...Sara
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Date: 9/4/2014 12:12:00 AM
I'm enjoying reading your posts, Sara. The embers crackle on. Thanks for you kind comment. Your PS friend,...Gene.
Date: 8/31/2014 11:44:00 AM
Gene- I am so personally impacted by this poem. I am at chapter one having spent a lifetime cloaked in sorrow and clever wisdom living life as a play. I don't think anyone can really know the heart of anyone else but with another to dance with we can come to better know ourselves. I will keep this poem to remind me what lies ahead. Truly- a profound write -feels written for me. Your friend and fan , :-) Christine
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Date: 9/4/2014 12:19:00 AM
I feel none of us are ever sure, when it comes to complications of emotion, our hearts and relationships with others. I plod along through the good and not so good. All we can do is hope for the best. Your comments inspire me to write...and they're very much appreciated....Your friend and fan....Gene.
Date: 8/30/2014 3:42:00 PM
Everything is about knowledge,even in love or passion.In life We learn from our mistakes,starting over again.The quality of a friendship,relationship or anything else is important.A clever poem,Really enjoyed reading it-Charma
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Date: 8/30/2014 5:54:00 PM
Thanks for the insightful response, Charmaine. It does become a trial and error experience. The coming together of two, complex human minds is beyond our understanding. Partnerships are a "play" without a star or script. Relationships can be judged as compatible quickly, using our experience and common sense. No 2 humans share the same, exact view. One bends, accommodating the other and vice versa. We're alone in our views and inner selves, as our partners are, IMHO...Always good to hear from you....Your friend...Gene
Date: 8/26/2014 10:00:00 AM
Love love love this poem. It reached my soul. Brenda Meier-Hans
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Date: 8/27/2014 1:07:00 AM
Thanks so much, Brenda. Comments such as yours gives us that gentle "push in the back" to compose. I'm my own severist critic and feel I'm too close to what I write to see it clearly. I sincerely appreciate your comment...Your friend...Gene
Date: 8/23/2014 9:14:00 PM
Dear Gene: Lovely write. Lovely read. A flow and inner music that comes through when read out loud. Wonder-full. Your message shines! Keep writing more my friend. All the best then, Leon. :)
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Gene Bourne
Date: 8/24/2014 12:32:00 AM
Thanks for your kind comments, Leon, who's work I greatly admire. I have a small hand-held recorder and sometimes like to record them, then play back mine and other member's poems I admire. Again, I appreciate your encouraging words...Your friend.....Gene
Date: 8/16/2014 1:58:00 PM
tends to make life simpler when living quality over quantity..a beautiful piece of work Gene that flows ever gentle in its reading...your friend Frederic
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Date: 8/16/2014 2:28:00 PM
Hi Fred. I value your opinion and thanks so much for your critique. I'm in the process of reading your post and am finding stunning and beautiful composing. Your poems always inspire me to compose. For that, you have my gratitude . I value you as a friend. Have a great weekend....Your friend...Gene.
Date: 8/15/2014 8:35:00 PM
This is very fine work. I enjoyed the read. BG
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Date: 8/15/2014 8:50:00 PM
I appreciate your kind words, Barbara. Thanks for the comment...Your PS Friend....Gene
Date: 8/15/2014 8:32:00 PM
Quality over quantity. Great words creating a beautiful picture.
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Date: 8/15/2014 8:51:00 PM
Thanks for the way you picture this poem....Your PS friend....Gene