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Flag Ship

A black cloud circles.
Man's doom is seen in the sky.
The storms at the ports,
Where trade and commerce soon die,
Ships and flags still floating by.

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Edward Wraith

Date: 6/24/2024 6:58:00 AM

Loved your opening line, really sets the scene for this dark tanka. The ominous and depressive nature of this piece lingers long after the read is over. I loved it Hilda. Great work

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/24/2024 8:47:00 AM

I'm honored. Thank you.

Howard Kerr

Date: 6/11/2024 9:17:00 AM

Hi Hilda, This deeply moving Tanka is superbly written. Excellent scene and setting capture in tandem with apt dark portraits. This enduring piece displays compassion and sincerity Howard

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/11/2024 11:48:00 AM

Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/7/2024 4:37:00 PM

A nicely written tanka!

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/7/2024 4:47:00 PM

Thank you

Jack Horne

Date: 6/5/2024 6:55:00 AM

love this clever write - very thought-provoking

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/5/2024 9:04:00 AM

Thank you. I appreciate your comment.

Ink Empress

Date: 6/4/2024 11:32:00 AM

Dear hilda what a descriptive and deeply meaningful tanka this is; i love your opening line especially “ a black cloud circles” that sets a very ominous setting. And the rest just flows seamlessly! Profound write! Always a pleasure reading your work. Sending you light always

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/4/2024 12:36:00 PM

Thank you, Ink. Between my mental blocks, a poem suddenly jumps in. I search constantly.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/4/2024 11:18:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your creative write. Have a blessed day.......................

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/4/2024 12:32:00 PM

Thank you, Paula.

Paige Hind

Date: 6/3/2024 4:37:00 PM

Beautiful writing!

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/3/2024 4:46:00 PM

Thank you.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/2/2024 12:30:00 PM

Great!

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/2/2024 12:42:00 PM

Thank you.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/1/2024 11:19:00 PM

Storms seem to be the order of the day. Wonder how Texas is faring.

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/2/2024 5:55:00 AM

Ask Sara.

Joseph May

Date: 6/1/2024 6:01:00 AM

Black clouds signal things to come, Nicely penned

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/1/2024 7:44:00 AM

Thank you. I enjoyed the nice break from rhyme by creating a tanka.

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/1/2024 5:33:00 AM

Hilda, your poetry appears to be replete with foreboding significance. Well-crafted and captivating.

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/1/2024 7:43:00 AM

Thank you. I value your opinion.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 5/31/2024 11:01:00 PM

Your poem seems full of ominous portent, Hilda. Nicely written and absorbing. :)

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 6/1/2024 5:26:00 AM

I enjoy hearing from you. Tankas are so short that I was unable to expand. The sea is usually a good background for a poem.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/31/2024 3:51:00 PM

Chilling picture painted here, Hilda. Do you think that 'free trade' is dead and gone forever? Perhaps so... Or, rather, is your tanka referring to climate change's effect on commerce?... Much to ponder here. Thanks, Gershon

Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/2/2024 7:16:00 PM

Great question in your reply there. Hard to tell what China, let alone Russia, will do to us...

Hilda Greenhough
Date: 5/31/2024 4:30:00 PM

America is great because it has two oceans. Only Canada has the same. Russia and the Ukraine are fighting over a port. China wants ocean dominance. We will be divided up by all the unrest and we will no longer have an advantage. Will America be partitioned into two countries?

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