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Flag Ship

A black cloud circles.
Man's doom is seen in the sky.
The storms at the ports,
Where trade and commerce soon die,
Ships and flags still floating by.

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Edward Wraith

June 24, 2024 at 6:58 AM

Loved your opening line, really sets the scene for this dark tanka. The ominous and depressive nature of this piece lingers long after the read is over. I loved it Hilda. Great work

Hilda Greenhough

June 24, 2024 at 8:47 AM

I'm honored. Thank you.

Howard Kerr

June 11, 2024 at 9:17 AM

Hi Hilda, This deeply moving Tanka is superbly written. Excellent scene and setting capture in tandem with apt dark portraits. This enduring piece displays compassion and sincerity Howard

Hilda Greenhough

June 11, 2024 at 11:48 AM

Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich

June 7, 2024 at 4:37 PM

A nicely written tanka!

Hilda Greenhough

June 7, 2024 at 4:47 PM

Thank you

Jack Horne

June 5, 2024 at 6:55 AM

love this clever write - very thought-provoking

Hilda Greenhough

June 5, 2024 at 9:04 AM

Thank you. I appreciate your comment.

Ink Empress

June 4, 2024 at 11:32 AM

Dear hilda what a descriptive and deeply meaningful tanka this is; i love your opening line especially “ a black cloud circles” that sets a very ominous setting. And the rest just flows seamlessly! Profound write! Always a pleasure reading your work. Sending you light always

Hilda Greenhough

June 4, 2024 at 12:36 PM

Thank you, Ink. Between my mental blocks, a poem suddenly jumps in. I search constantly.

Paula Goldsmith

June 4, 2024 at 11:18 AM

I enjoyed reading your creative write. Have a blessed day.......................

Hilda Greenhough

June 4, 2024 at 12:32 PM

Thank you, Paula.

Paige Hind

June 3, 2024 at 4:37 PM

Beautiful writing!

Hilda Greenhough

June 3, 2024 at 4:46 PM

Thank you.

Kim Rodrigues

June 2, 2024 at 12:30 PM

Great!

Hilda Greenhough

June 2, 2024 at 12:42 PM

Thank you.

Victor Buhagiar

June 1, 2024 at 11:19 PM

Storms seem to be the order of the day. Wonder how Texas is faring.

Hilda Greenhough

June 2, 2024 at 5:55 AM

Ask Sara.

Joseph May

June 1, 2024 at 6:01 AM

Black clouds signal things to come, Nicely penned

Hilda Greenhough

June 1, 2024 at 7:44 AM

Thank you. I enjoyed the nice break from rhyme by creating a tanka.

Sotto Poet

June 1, 2024 at 5:33 AM

Hilda, your poetry appears to be replete with foreboding significance. Well-crafted and captivating.

Hilda Greenhough

June 1, 2024 at 7:43 AM

Thank you. I value your opinion.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

May 31, 2024 at 11:01 PM

Your poem seems full of ominous portent, Hilda. Nicely written and absorbing. :)

Hilda Greenhough

June 1, 2024 at 5:26 AM

I enjoy hearing from you. Tankas are so short that I was unable to expand. The sea is usually a good background for a poem.

Gershon Wolf

May 31, 2024 at 3:51 PM

Chilling picture painted here, Hilda. Do you think that 'free trade' is dead and gone forever? Perhaps so... Or, rather, is your tanka referring to climate change's effect on commerce?... Much to ponder here. Thanks, Gershon

Gershon Wolf

June 2, 2024 at 7:16 PM

Great question in your reply there. Hard to tell what China, let alone Russia, will do to us...

Hilda Greenhough

May 31, 2024 at 4:30 PM

America is great because it has two oceans. Only Canada has the same. Russia and the Ukraine are fighting over a port. China wants ocean dominance. We will be divided up by all the unrest and we will no longer have an advantage. Will America be partitioned into two countries?

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