Fisher Mcbride

On the beach sat the fisher McBride
With his pole in a stand by his side
Then suddenly he had a big bite
And his pole took off into flight
Up he sprang, his mouth open wide
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Dietrich Avatar
March 10, 2015 at 3:59 PM
conjures up quite a picture!! congrats on your win.
Allison Avatar
March 10, 2015 at 2:48 PM
made me smile - congrats :-) Hugs Jan xx
Guzzi Avatar
February 27, 2015 at 10:46 AM
Almost there John LONG/LONG/short/short/LONG - lines 3 & 4 should be shorter - try for 9/9/7/7/9 or 9/9/6/6/9 etc. on the syllable count! You are getting the meter pretty well! Light & Love
Squires Avatar
March 2, 2015 at 9:54 PM
Thanks for your help. I will have to try again....never did this style before.
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