Fish Party

Each goldfish
is like a birthday candle:
fins flickering 
in under-water sparkles
of sunlit sugar.
Sprinkled, trickled, rippled.
My face is staring
over the pond;
they gather
for party bags
we call stinky-fish-food,
while cloud-balloons
make funny faces
and float far away.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Wolf Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 8:12 PM
Wow! What an imaginative write, Jeanette! You've turned cheap fish food into the finest caviar. Just sprinkle a little champagne into their tank, and those goldfish will be 'all set!' Nice, Gershon
Swan Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 8:41 PM
They would eat their own eggs too! Thanks for your kind words. Fish ponds are good for staring at too. :)
Puddifoot Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 8:00 AM
i love that image of a goldfish 'like a birthday candle of flickering fins', also the subtle alliteration and playful language; i do enjoy your work, it's unique and quirky
Swan Avatar
May 16, 2024 at 3:36 PM
Thank you fellow word-smith. J :)
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