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First Night

Oh, how they danced as the sun shimmered red,
it dipped far away as the stars upwards sped.
Still, they danced, leaving footprints on wet sand,
Sometimes straight or crisscrossing, everything grand.

Occasionally, they stopped, and in a hug, they kissed.
Or ran to some cave that was their secluded tryst.
Time passed fast, and they returned to their bridal suite.
Before retiring, they drank champagne and pastry sweet.
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Godwin Avatar
February 7, 2025 at 2:59 PM
Victor, My Victor - so happy that you are giving me the bird again - seriously, I love seeing the bird on my pages. I saw you in my dreams after returning to PS. You were seated behind a desk, composing poetry on a computer and smiled widely and grandly when I walked, then you went to fetch something and didn't return. It was a happy and confusing dream. I loved reading the above poem because it is so you, the you who writes poems that bring me joy. Your pen stays true ... CayCay
Hind Avatar
February 6, 2025 at 8:57 PM
Like "leaving footprints on wet sand, Sometimes straight or crisscrossing" beautiful
Tor Avatar
February 4, 2025 at 10:32 PM
Such a wonderful time they had together does it get any better than that Victor? Thanks for writing enjoyed reading my friend, hope all is well...
Eslinger Avatar
February 3, 2025 at 5:57 AM
Wow, Victor, this is so lovely. It’s my first poem to read after being off here a while. And it paint a dear scene! Missed you. Hugs
Kitchin Avatar
February 3, 2025 at 3:41 AM
Victor, a delightful poem, sweet and romantic.
Singh Avatar
February 3, 2025 at 3:06 AM
Forgetting the world ! This will be an unforgettable day in future Very nice
Empress Avatar
February 2, 2025 at 11:45 PM
Such a beautiful ambiance youv described in such an artistic manner! Love the flow and how youv painted imagery, and the picture youv used here is so fitting too for the poem. I especially love the lines "it dipped far away as the stars upwards sped. Still, they danced, leaving footprints on wet sand, Sometimes straight or crisscrossing, everything grand." How stunning!!! I can see through your well articulated lines! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always
ambasta Avatar
February 2, 2025 at 10:22 PM
It's so lovely !! How beautifully you penned the moment . It's just....... amazing
Williams Avatar
February 2, 2025 at 1:36 AM
Dear Victor, a beautiful romantic one with lots of imagery. Just lovely...Hugs
George Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 8:38 PM
Their first night sounds so pleasant and romantic. The location they chose adds to the joy of their auspicious union. Beautifully composed, dear Victor.
George Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 12:16 PM
I can imagine the calm and love they have. Being watched by the sun, marked by the wet sand and cheered up with champagne. I'll be sure to use a white wine when I dance with my beloved as I do not like champagne.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 10:40 AM
This romance near the sea is sensational, dear Victor!
Canerdy Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 8:11 AM
Victor, this is such a delightful, descriptive piece! Janice
Buehler Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 6:02 PM
Victor, your excellent poem captures unforgettable moments, dear to lovers' hearts. I enjoyed this beautiful love tale. :)
Poet Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 4:29 PM
Cute little moments to cherish always. An exquisite tale of fantasy and love, Your depiction of honeymoon love is truly touching, Victor.
Dietrich Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 3:34 PM
A really sweet portrayal of honeymoon love, Victor.
Kendrick Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 12:45 PM
Ahhh!!! The pastry/ies I could go for. I am a sweet lover. Thanks for sharing your passionate work. Sara K
Rolland Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 12:39 PM
beautiful romance and imaginary, i love the sentiments here, two for one, one for two thanks poet
Godwin Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 10:29 AM
Victor, oh, Victor, long has been the wait to realize this moment of splendor ... OKAY, RETURN TO SERIOUS - - I have not felt lighthearted and playful in quite a long time which means our visit is truly memorable. Spontaneous, fulfilling moments are blessed rarities and I'm so glad we shared one. You Look Marvelous ... CayCAy
Read Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 6:50 AM
Two souls united by love,hope your keeping well Victor.
Cunningham Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 5:34 AM
Their honeymoon sounds bliss Victor. Tom
Andresen Avatar
January 31, 2025 at 5:27 AM
- Together in a long and happy life ... beautiful, Victor :) - I wish you a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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