JC Brul Poet Monorhyme

First Moment

A cinnamon twilight  sky
                        seabirds fly
                      on warm July
                 a three-fold sigh
            a newborn's first cry
                           whisper I,   
 "Thank you, Oh Most High!"




7/15/2020

1st Place
STRAND COMPLETELY NEW (10),any form,any theme
Contest Judged:  7/17/2020 6:23:00 AM
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
                              
Entered for " Your Best Mono Rhyme Poetry Contest"
Sponsored by William Kekaula

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William Kelii Kekaula August 20, 2021 at 9:11 PM Brevity enlightens words distinctively, and the best forms and free their aims. Blessings, JCB, for sharing your profound talents, Aloha!

Sara Kendrick November 25, 2020 at 5:55 AM I really like the spiritual side of this one. Very descriptive and expressive work. Congrats on this winner. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Caren Krutsinger July 21, 2020 at 11:27 PM So gorgeously penned, a sweet tribute.

Regina Mcintosh July 19, 2020 at 8:28 AM Awesome. I LOVE IT :) God bless you

Beata Agustin July 19, 2020 at 6:07 AM Wow! Congrats! So delightful from the top til the end; yes, especially the thanksgiving expression; great monorhyme as well. God bless you.

Harshita Chaudhary July 17, 2020 at 11:29 PM That is so beautiful. Seems like the newborn is appreciating God's creation. Congratulations on your top win:)

Sam Kauffman July 17, 2020 at 10:59 PM Just lovely, JCB and filled with the sweetness of new life. Congratulations on your first place win!

Andrea Dietrich July 17, 2020 at 8:34 PM Yessss, so glad to see the win here. Congrats.

John Watt July 17, 2020 at 6:41 PM I'm loving the cinnamon twilight sky, and the spontaneous eruption of gratitude to God in the end... I really like your monorhymes and how you lined them up on the right side for a delightful effect. Well done, JCB, and congrats on your #1 win today!

Paula Goldsmith July 17, 2020 at 2:43 PM Congratulations on your win. Cinnamon for a sky or in coffee that is for me. I love your line, ""Thank you, Oh Most High!" Enjoy your win and day..............

Evelyn Judy Buehler July 17, 2020 at 12:24 PM A charming and touching poem, which depicts a precious first moment in a most beautiful way. Congratulations on your top win. Best of wishes. :)

Andrea Dietrich July 15, 2020 at 4:38 PM love the pattern and that cinnamon sky!