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First Moment

A cinnamon twilight sky seabirds fly on warm July a three-fold sigh a newborn's first cry whisper I, "Thank you, Oh Most High!" 7/15/2020 1st Place STRAND COMPLETELY NEW (10),any form,any theme Contest Judged: 7/17/2020 6:23:00 AM Sponsored by: Brian Strand Entered for " Your Best Mono Rhyme Poetry Contest" Sponsored by William Kekaula

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Hilo Poet

Date: 8/20/2021 9:11:00 PM

Brevity enlightens words distinctively, and the best forms and free their aims. Blessings, JCB, for sharing your profound talents, Aloha!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/25/2020 5:55:00 AM

I really like the spiritual side of this one. Very descriptive and expressive work. Congrats on this winner. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/21/2020 11:27:00 PM

So gorgeously penned, a sweet tribute.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/19/2020 8:28:00 AM

Awesome. I LOVE IT :) God bless you

Beata Agustin

Date: 7/19/2020 6:07:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! So delightful from the top til the end; yes, especially the thanksgiving expression; great monorhyme as well. God bless you.

Harshita Chaudhary

Date: 7/17/2020 11:29:00 PM

That is so beautiful. Seems like the newborn is appreciating God's creation. Congratulations on your top win:)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/17/2020 10:59:00 PM

Just lovely, JCB and filled with the sweetness of new life. Congratulations on your first place win!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/17/2020 8:34:00 PM

Yessss, so glad to see the win here. Congrats.

John Watt

Date: 7/17/2020 6:41:00 PM

I'm loving the cinnamon twilight sky, and the spontaneous eruption of gratitude to God in the end... I really like your monorhymes and how you lined them up on the right side for a delightful effect. Well done, JCB, and congrats on your #1 win today!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/17/2020 2:43:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Cinnamon for a sky or in coffee that is for me. I love your line, ""Thank you, Oh Most High!" Enjoy your win and day..............

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 7/17/2020 12:24:00 PM

A charming and touching poem, which depicts a precious first moment in a most beautiful way. Congratulations on your top win. Best of wishes. :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/15/2020 4:38:00 PM

love the pattern and that cinnamon sky!