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Fire Raging

words
fitting-together
like patchwork,
 
then, sound spills
like a chorus thrills,

then the poem,
a fire raging 
consuming,
overwhelmingly the air,

with urgency,
I stand far away,

in timelessness.... 

listening.

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Jerry Bolton

May 22, 2016 at 8:44 AM

Sometimes, James, poetry can absolutely affect us in that was. Whether it is our poetry, or another's. That is when we step back from reading or composing, and think, damn, but that is excellent writing. And so, too, is this little short, but oh so dramatic!

Charlie Smith

May 22, 2016 at 7:47 AM

Well done James, congratulations on being featured...

Jaycee Cervenka

January 22, 2015 at 11:27 AM

I like it but think you can tighten lines 6 & 7 a bit and I'd like it more written as the poem a fire raging (out of control can be left or not but is a bit over used). I also would not but a period after profound as the next part does not make a cohesive sentence. Take this out of poetic form and run the lines together to see where it breaks and punctuation really needs to be. timeless-> timelessness.

James Ranahan

January 22, 2015 at 11:52 PM

Janet: Thank you for your comments. I will revise this attempt no doubt. Thank you for your suggestions. Jim