Dorian Petersen Potter Poet Rhyme

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An Octaz-Rhyme poem.

Finger Licking Delicious

pumpkin pie
Tasty finger licking
Delicious almost dissolving
right on top of my tongue and inside
My mouth I sat there and waited
Cause pie was so hot
Burnt is what got
I cry




contest:Plentitude of pies
Sponsored by: Sheri Fresonke Harper
10.08.2014

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Jan Allison December 8, 2014 at 2:29 PM OUCH... but I loved the structure of the poem - many congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Sheri Fresonke Harper December 8, 2014 at 11:58 AM Oh, I hate finger burns, this is lovely. Thanks for entering the pie contest, truly wonderful submissions sent in.

Danitra David October 12, 2014 at 11:51 AM I wish I knew more about the craft of writing. Superb poem. I love the simplicity yet profoundness. I believe any pie lover can go there-very nice! Dorian Petersen Potter October 12, 2014 at 12:36 PM Thank you Danitra for reading and your very nice comments. ;) Have a lovely day! Love peace and light! xxxx D.

Bl Devnath October 9, 2014 at 1:22 PM I say here to you hi! Just delicious certainly at the time of finger licking. Good luck in the contest, my lovely friend, bl Dorian Petersen Potter October 12, 2014 at 12:33 PM Thank you BL my friend for stopping by and your sweet comments and wishes! Much appreciated. Have a wonderful and safe day! Love peace and light! xxxx D.

Tim Smith October 9, 2014 at 12:47 PM Poor baby...nothing worse than a burnt tongue...I would love some of that pumpkin pie...I'll trade some soup for it..lol...hugs Tim Dorian Petersen Potter October 12, 2014 at 12:28 PM Thanks Tim! You're so sweet! And of course I can do that. Or we can trade with some of your delicious soup! ;) Hugs! xxxx D.

Casarah Nance October 8, 2014 at 9:48 PM This is great! awesome job with this I enjoyed the structure and tasty-ness of this! Dorian Petersen Potter October 8, 2014 at 10:12 PM Thank you Cas for visiting and for your wonderful comment! Glad you liked it. ;)Hugs! Love peace and light! xxxx D.