Finger Licking Delicious

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An Octaz-Rhyme poem.

pumpkin pie Tasty finger licking Delicious almost dissolving right on top of my tongue and inside My mouth I sat there and waited Cause pie was so hot Burnt is what got I cry contest:Plentitude of pies Sponsored by: Sheri Fresonke Harper 10.08.2014

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Jan Allison

Date: 12/8/2014 2:29:00 PM

OUCH... but I loved the structure of the poem - many congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 12/8/2014 11:58:00 AM

Oh, I hate finger burns, this is lovely. Thanks for entering the pie contest, truly wonderful submissions sent in.

Danitra David

Date: 10/12/2014 11:51:00 AM

I wish I knew more about the craft of writing. Superb poem. I love the simplicity yet profoundness. I believe any pie lover can go there-very nice!

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/12/2014 12:36:00 PM

Thank you Danitra for reading and your very nice comments. ;) Have a lovely day! Love peace and light! xxxx D.

Bl Devnath

Date: 10/9/2014 1:22:00 PM

I say here to you hi! Just delicious certainly at the time of finger licking. Good luck in the contest, my lovely friend, bl

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/12/2014 12:33:00 PM

Thank you BL my friend for stopping by and your sweet comments and wishes! Much appreciated. Have a wonderful and safe day! Love peace and light! xxxx D.

Tim Smith

Date: 10/9/2014 12:47:00 PM

Poor baby...nothing worse than a burnt tongue...I would love some of that pumpkin pie...I'll trade some soup for it..lol...hugs Tim

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/12/2014 12:28:00 PM

Thanks Tim! You're so sweet! And of course I can do that. Or we can trade with some of your delicious soup! ;) Hugs! xxxx D.

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/8/2014 9:48:00 PM

This is great! awesome job with this I enjoyed the structure and tasty-ness of this!

Dorian Petersen Potter
Date: 10/8/2014 10:12:00 PM

Thank you Cas for visiting and for your wonderful comment! Glad you liked it. ;)Hugs! Love peace and light! xxxx D.