Finding a Rainbow

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He stood at the French window fascinated with the storm outside.
Thunder boomed as lightening formed serpents in the ebony sky.
There would be no rainbows beneath the heavy dark clouds.

The uncouth woman lay supine on a comfortable couch
She looked at him almost contemptuously like a jilted bride,
Her cruel eyes darted like lancets that could only kill.
Had she even shown some compassion, he would have 
Run to her and planted on her full lips, a loving kiss.

He felt her looks, knowing full well why he felt so jaded,
Yet slivers of her lust still resided in his soul,
She recognized he was not just some ghost from the past.
Though he yearned to tolerate her as a lover,
He knew she was not worth it.  She realized how he hated her,
Saw her face darkening and foreboding,
Little did she know how strong he was and in full control.

He knew she wanted his body, not his tender love.
He felt her yearning heart now beating faster.
Outside thunder rumbled across the murky skies.
This wrought havoc as it continued to rain!
There was a fury inside her too, yet he yielded not.
He refused to be a mere plaything in the hands of a wanton woman.

Calmly he put on his jacket and raincoat,
And left her, knowing he needed a true radiant rainbow.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 8/17/2021 5:00:00 AM
An awesome write Victor, always turn down a serpent of a storm, soon will come a rainbow to bring hope, comfort and warmth…. Hugs, Belle
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Date: 8/16/2021 4:36:00 AM
A beautiful story Victor. Truly he deserved a radiant rainbow... Enjoyed reading.. God bless.. ~ Ani
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Date: 8/14/2021 7:16:00 AM
Well I hope he jilted her permanently and for real - she seems like a nasty piece of work - a fantastic poem as always Victor. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 8/14/2021 3:36:00 AM
A timeless poem! A great story well-presented with rich imagery. Best wishes.
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Date: 8/12/2021 2:41:00 PM
Interesting story told in poetic form. So she was a wanton woman that he had gotten for himself. It was good he walked away because is she was a wanton woman then he might get the bad disease. Thanks for your visits to my page. I appreciate your presence there. Sara
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Date: 8/12/2021 3:44:00 AM
Wow Victor this was like watching play at the theatre as each scene played out. Enjoyed it very much and he certainy did the right thing as one should always desire a true radiant rainbow... hugs Ann xx
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Date: 8/12/2021 3:13:00 AM
I say, this is a bit Shakespearean Victor. Pleased your protagonist shook off temptation...Delice
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Date: 8/11/2021 6:47:00 PM
Wow, love the poem and the theme, yes a scene from a play i see acting out, the thoughts and passion of the author.
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Date: 8/11/2021 3:51:00 PM
Splendid writing, Victor. I loved the ending of this emotive verse, with its promise of brighter days. Hugs.
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Date: 8/11/2021 1:13:00 PM
- A sensible choice ... great and powerfully written, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/11/2021 12:41:00 PM
Ah, good for him. Love doesn't come easy but when it does, the rainbow of passion follows naturally This was not the case, well written piece Victor
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Date: 8/11/2021 10:04:00 AM
Way to go, Victor!
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Date: 8/11/2021 6:19:00 AM
Glad he walked away from this spurious relationship. True to real life. Wonderfully spun, Victor.
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Date: 8/11/2021 6:02:00 AM
Great analogy of the rain and murky sky and the lustful woman, and great last line, Well penned Victor
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Date: 8/11/2021 3:33:00 AM
What a powerful words Victor, I loved theses lines: Thunder boomed as lightening formed serpents in the ebony sky. There would be no rainbows beneath the heavy dark clouds. This is in my fave.
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Date: 8/11/2021 2:38:00 AM
A true gentleman Victor, im sure he'll find his true rainbow one day and find a woman who can share his love. Tom
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Date: 8/11/2021 12:35:00 AM
Wow! very powerful poem, Victor, I simply love that second line:) awesome!
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Date: 8/10/2021 10:03:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Victor,
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