Final Door

Brown house
Grey smiles
Green green grass
Black shoes
Crystal tears with heart felt whispers
Hugs

Blue sky with cream teeth
Green green grass
(hold that thought)
Glassed water grasped
Taut innards
Flowers brought

White horses
Braided manes
White lilies
Window pane
White carriage
To carry forth
Green green grass
Hold that thought

Passing traffic
Collars grasped
Blurry images
Tend then pass
Crystal tears
Smart black tie
Shake and smile
Avoid the eye

Deep breath enter in
Listen watch
Let them begin
Then stare at the floor

'Bye bye darling'
Open door

(using colours and images as a distraction to absolutely the worst day of my life)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 6/2/2012 7:54:00 AM
Wow Karen. This is stunning in that it brings me so clearly to that same day you know. It plunges into my bones. I remember the grass looked so strangely fake to me. love, Kathy
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Karen Deeks
Date: 6/3/2012 12:31:00 AM
Thank you so so much Kathryn for your thoughts and reaction to this piece... Karen :) and yes it did appear over green like vibrant fake turf on that dreaded day....
Date: 6/1/2012 8:08:00 AM
Love it. I've been there, done that. Also, thank you for your kind comments on my poetry.
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Karen Deeks
Date: 6/1/2012 11:57:00 AM
thanks w d thomas and im only sorry for you having to experience the same as i did...karen...;)
Date: 6/1/2012 3:51:00 AM
soup mail Interesting poetry here babe
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Karen Deeks
Date: 6/1/2012 11:55:00 AM
Cheers don... for reading this and leaving your view on it...karen :)
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