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Entry for This or That, Vol 31 Poetry Contest: Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh        

 

Felix Culpa

Some time ago, when we were free to do;
       ten I was, or twelve?
I walked along a misty lane to school
the etched patterns of ferns and trees
  on my window when I awoke
         now echoed in the frozen grass
                 and early ferns
             being gently crushed
       by each step I took.
The sun had begun its morning due
          to warm the earth,
and generate the day's miasma mist;
as did the breathing of the gathering crowd,
              which hung upon the hedge
          of privet, hawthorn, yew,
      to rest upon a thousand spider webs
               a myriad of droplets dew.
And there it was
        the spider
             fat and yellow;
                 waiting.
Not in the shadows, 
     as the others I had seen
             but, eight legs akimbo
in the centre of it's now opaque web
                taunting.
I had a cricket in a matchbox
            in my pocket
A prize from yesterday's 
 sweet forage.
   I placed the wriggling insect
upon the web and watched
               the attack
          the bite
   the wrap.
                And so I write
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Layne Avatar
April 9, 2025 at 9:03 AM
Hey Terry, I just started scrolling the list from Edward's contest. I like to read some of the others for perspective. I saw your entry. You had me up until the end. Is this a true story?
Miller Avatar
April 9, 2025 at 2:15 PM
Hey Trina, thank you for the visit and reading my poem, indeed it is a true story
Ibeh Avatar
April 7, 2025 at 4:32 AM
Terry, this is such a superb piece. I love the presentation, too. It looks quite nice on the page. Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!
Miller Avatar
April 7, 2025 at 7:43 AM
Thank you Edward for the placement, kind comments and for running the very interesting, sometimes taxing contests
Wolf Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 8:14 PM
Very enjoyable whimsy and caprice, Terry. Thanks, Gershon
Miller Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 2:08 AM
Thank you Gershon
Cunningham Avatar
March 20, 2025 at 10:03 PM
Those childhood memories stay with you forever, it's a shame we have to grow old. Good luck in the contest Terry. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
Miller Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 2:08 AM
Thank you Tom enjoy your weekend too
Foster Avatar
March 20, 2025 at 9:00 PM
Thank you for taking me on that journey with you. Reminiscent of years gone by. The ending,… well 10 year-old boys will be 10 year-old boys that’s what they did :) nature at work. Well written Terry. Cheers.
Miller Avatar
March 28, 2025 at 2:09 AM
Thank you Margaret
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