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I'm going through the motions whilst surfing in the sea Now I’ve contracted typhoid, oh deary deary me! Raw sewage pumped into the sea really is outrageous Typhoid is a horrid disease and sadly it's contagious 02~07~17

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 2/10/2017 2:22:00 PM

Jan this is a great poem you wrote. So true to your words.I rated it a 7 I am glad you liked my poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/10/2017 2:56:00 PM

Thanks Darlene:-) hugs Jan xx

Phillip Garcia

Date: 2/8/2017 5:38:00 PM

A classic Jan poem: Superbly written, meaningful subject, and, of course, a touch of poo

Jan Allison
Date: 2/10/2017 2:57:00 PM

A touch of poo - hmm would make a good title lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2017 5:15:00 PM

ha. the picture certainly depicts it, Jan. Good one.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/10/2017 2:57:00 PM

I found the pic then wrote the poem lol:-) hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/8/2017 2:07:00 PM

Pollution seems to be a universal problem, Jan. One can understand when an oil drill ruptures and spills its contents into the sea, but pollution by neglect is an unforgivable offense committed by selfish people. You said a lot in four lines! Great work, Jan. Hugs to you.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/10/2017 2:58:00 PM

Thanks Carolyn it really shouldn't happen in this day and age:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 2/8/2017 1:30:00 PM

Many people are not really aware of what happens to sewage. Some does get special treatment, but ultimately it's got to end somewhere! And, yes, your point about typhoid is a reality! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 2/9/2017 7:58:00 AM

I found the pic and the poem followed:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/7/2017 9:16:00 PM

It's a sad state that we as human beings, who pride ourselves on being so clever, cannot figure out how to dispose of waste other than polluting our waters. I would say this is a top priority considering our growing population. The Nobel prize should go to the next person who figures that one out! A great message in your poem Jan. ; ) 7

Jan Allison
Date: 2/8/2017 4:20:00 AM

Thanks Connie I was inspired by the picture:-) hugs Jan xx

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon

Date: 2/7/2017 4:15:00 PM

A great display of creativity! I am glad to stumble upon this today.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 4:56:00 PM

Thanks Adeniji:-) hugs Jan xx

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 2/7/2017 2:58:00 PM

Oh dear, she's feeling blue//after a swim in the poo//the pristine sea//filled up with pee//is now a soiled stinky slough. YUCK! Huggabuggas ~ j

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 4:56:00 PM

ha ha ha John:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/7/2017 1:57:00 PM

- ..... did you say contagious .... I feel sick already :)))) - Well done, Jan - Love it - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 4:57:00 PM

Its vile to read of untreated sewage out there Anne Lise:-( hugs Janxx

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/7/2017 12:48:00 PM

I'm almost certain that is a crime. I know it happens more than we know. A humorous take on this very important topic, Jan. Well done:)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 4:58:00 PM

Many thanks for your comment Daniel - going through the 'motions' - ugh:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 2/7/2017 12:14:00 PM

Lovely imagery, yuck...

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 4:58:00 PM

Many thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 2/7/2017 11:36:00 AM

It disgusts me as well that I water is polluted.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 11:56:00 AM

Sewage still spills out into the water around our little Island - it is supposed to be 'treated' but there have been leaks of untreated waste - ugh:-( hugs jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 2/7/2017 10:45:00 AM

Yuck!!!!! Jan!!!! Now my stomach is upset, that's not a picture I longed to see in my mind this morning. But I do think you got your point across in a wonderfully imaginative poetic way.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/7/2017 10:48:00 AM

I came across the pic and knowing how we have had incidents of raw sewage being pumped out to sea I couldn't resist this charming little ditty lol By the way I don't surf or swim so its total fiction for me:-) hugs Jan xx