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Feathers- the Haiku For Contest

with barely a twitch
   buzzard masters summer sky
   orchestrated blades

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David Mohn

July 17, 2015 at 8:22 PM

What a smart write Viv..love it

Viv Wigley

July 17, 2015 at 11:36 PM

Thanks, Dave. I do enjoy Haiku. Regards, Viv

Eve Roper

July 16, 2015 at 5:42 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win a 7. Hugs Eve

Viv Wigley

July 16, 2015 at 6:21 PM

I shall polish your seven every day, Eve. Viv x

James Inman

July 16, 2015 at 1:36 PM

Love the use of contrast between the negative image of the word buzzard with the absolute grace and beauty of their flight. True masters in the air. In reference to one of your comments, Richard, at times where I live you can see hundreds if not thousands of vultures spinning in a whirlwind that reaches thousands of feet in the air. Incredible sight. (It is over a garbage dump) Also, I enjoy reading your comments almost as much as your poetry. Your verbal wit is... ah, words fail me.

Viv Wigley

July 16, 2015 at 6:21 PM

Cheers James, I appreciate your visit. I sometimes wonder how many people whereI live just go through life miserably without bothering to look up and see some joy. Then again, maybe we all do that sometimes. Regards, Viv

Shadow Hamilton

July 16, 2015 at 11:32 AM

lovely Viv congrats on win hugs

Viv Wigley

July 16, 2015 at 6:18 PM

Thanks, Shadow, a good contest all round. Viv x

George Aul

July 16, 2015 at 9:22 AM

Congrats on your win, nicely done...... George

Viv Wigley

July 16, 2015 at 6:17 PM

Cheers, George, I appreciate your visit. Regards, Viv

John Lawless

July 16, 2015 at 6:49 AM

Nature, the season, that last line....the feathers as blades or a vague reference to the talons .....Love this one Viv, methinks it should have surpassed the angels.

Viv Wigley

July 16, 2015 at 7:09 AM

Thanks, John, much appreciated. It's nice when the contest subject can evoke such strong Haikus as the entries for this one. Yours was positively etheral, nice one. Regards, Viv

Jan Allison

July 16, 2015 at 2:39 AM

You 'wung' it well Mr Viv congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley

July 16, 2015 at 5:23 AM

'Wanged', Jan. Come on, watch your grammar. Viv x

Andrea Dietrich

July 15, 2015 at 11:32 PM

btw. I have to squint my eyes to see your avatar, but you sure don't look ugly like you called yourself in the flirting poem., haha

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:37 PM

Thanks for the compliment, my missus doesn't think I'm ugly but then again, she's the woman who has a favourite watering can in the shed x

Andrea Dietrich

July 15, 2015 at 11:31 PM

Incredible imagery here. Congrats on your win!

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:36 PM

Thanks, Andrea, there are some terrific entries here. I think the very economy of the Haiku makes one work a little harder, which is good. Viv x

Poet Destroyer A

July 15, 2015 at 11:18 PM

Viv, now this is my fav... Love how you wrote of buzzards. That's some epic imagery going on, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Always ~LINDA~

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:25 PM

Thanks Linda, I'm flattered. There are some terrific entries and I've only just finished commenting on them, so your typing fingers must be exhausted. I suggest you rest them in a large glass of Pinot Noir. Then dry them off with your tongue (hic!) Viv x

Kp Nunez

July 15, 2015 at 11:11 PM

...and Viv, I just got the notification... Congratulations! I am humbled to be in the same winners' list as this masterful stroke of pen!

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:23 PM

Awww, shucks. Viv x

Rob Carmack

July 15, 2015 at 10:57 PM

Nice imagery in this and that last line is perfect.

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:04 PM

Thanks Rob, the way those wing feathers can move as one or independently fascinates me- I can only just wave to somebody without having to really concentrate. Regards, Viv

Kp Nunez

July 15, 2015 at 10:48 PM

Came to read your reply...read your reply to others...and had another round of chuckles. But then, the idea of myself exploding gave me the best imagery of the very British "bloody" sight, no matter complimentary the line may have been intended. :-)))) hugz!

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:03 PM

....and since you're not about to detonate in a firework display of loveliness, hugz from me tootles. Viv x

Skat A

July 15, 2015 at 10:47 PM

Viv:) Congratulations on your awesome feather win. **SKAT**

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 11:02 PM

Thanks, Skat, great contest. Viv x

Paul Callus

July 15, 2015 at 3:51 PM

An eye-catching haiku, Viv! An impressive picture I can well see! I love the end line! #7 // paul

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 10:07 PM

Thanks, Paul, got that last line from watching my brother's parrot preening itself, and the fanned-out wing looked a little like a Swiss army knife. Plus an analogy to propellor blades, so all in all an effective line, methinks. Regards, Viv

Kp Nunez

July 15, 2015 at 10:35 AM

Ah, this is one haiku moment one would not wish to miss! Love the sharp turn of your juxtaposition in the last line, which is poetry in and of itself. Awe! should do well in the contest! hugs!

Viv Wigley

July 15, 2015 at 10:05 PM

Thanks, lovely Kim. If you were any lovelier you would explode, and your neighbourhood would be covered in a thick layer of loveliness. Viv x

Lee Carter

July 13, 2015 at 11:11 PM

Dark and beautiful!

Viv Wigley

July 14, 2015 at 12:02 AM

Thanks, Lee, it's nice to be a short walk from Buzzard country. During the snows, one can walk out past the village into the fields with some raw liver and they circle, waiting. Makes the two hairs on the back of my neck stand on end.... Viv x

Laura Leiser

July 13, 2015 at 11:24 AM

Wow, I love this imagery, kinda dark, but great, Viv! Should be on top rung :)

Viv Wigley

July 13, 2015 at 12:58 PM

Thanks, Laura, I admire their effortless mastery, when I struggle like a clown just to get my shoes on in the morning :) . Viv x

Richard Lamoureux

July 13, 2015 at 8:07 AM

This is impressive! May it lift you to the top of the winners list.

Viv Wigley

July 13, 2015 at 12:57 PM

Thanks, Richard, a short walk from my home out to the fields beyond Mackworth village on a warm day will normally be rewarded with a buzzard patrol. Recently watched one glide over my house before it joined six others, spiralling upward like a tornado before peeling off and heading North. Left me speechless. Regards, Viv