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For Ink Empress Featherless Angels contest.

 

“People of the world don’t look at themselves, and so they blame one another.” - Rumi He struggles to forget that little boy anticipating his hero's return. Staring out through a dark window, wondering if sincere stars would show him a path home but he was a man not worthy of such a reception. Guess we don't get a choice, where and to whom we are born. The fatherless are like angels without feathers. Left behind in the silence of sins. In a lonely childhood playground, collecting shards from broken glass swings. His father was an illusive saviour to so many, but played a villain against his growth. How could one be so ignorant, unaware a child needs a role model to guide like a shepherd and his flock. It's a struggle being a black sheep in a white world of woollen hearts, wandering like a lost soul searching to belong - neglected by those too intoxicated with their vices. Absent in adolescence, life's lessons can be harsh, with bitter blood bleeding in stubborn stains. Now his ghost sings sad songs in absent dreams - will a mind perpetually be plagued by visions? People play the blame game, pointing fingers in angry accusations, about who hurt who, but there are no victors in emotive diversions. In misconception and misunderstanding, the misunderstood leave without a goodbye. Sometimes we don't get an opportunity to apologise, so some voices are lost forever. When there is nothing but silence, a child gifts his seat on the throne of forgiveness - because he is not a composition of parental chromosomes. In his father's darkness, he may recite his lyrics, as occasionally some sorrows resurface, but his mother's compassionate tears teach him how to spread light. Everything he is today, is inspired by not mirroring sins of his father's past. Maybe that's why he does not seek black horizons. only sincere skies, to observe the moon and stars.

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Date: 11/7/2023 8:21:00 AM
This line got to my heart, "to guide like a shepherd and his flock. It's a struggle being a black sheep in a white world of woolen hearts, wandering like a lost soul searching to belong. In his father's darkness, he may recite his lyrics." this last statement is so true. I saw it myself in my younger years but identifying it and with prayer changed. Congratulation on your win. Many blessings your way my friend.
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Date: 11/6/2023 9:35:00 AM
OMGoodness, Silent One! An incredibly sensitive subject matter that commoners find to be much too common! Poignancy that riddles so many households and is recalculated in innocent eyes! Sad all around, and my heart reaches out to all concerned, my friend! My compliments on your fine placement and enlightenment! Aloha, William
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Date: 11/6/2023 1:57:00 AM
I dont know how you do this everytime! I am literally tearing up as i read this again, how evocative and touching is this, it hurts my heart to see fatherless children and yes they do need role models too especially boys, and i cant help but feel for those that dont have a father present, despite them being alive. “ but his mother's compassionate tears teach him how to spread light.” i think you might have an idea of how this would touch my soul! Truly i want to quote every line but, ill just
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Date: 11/6/2023 1:58:00 AM
End this comment with, how seamlessly your alliterations metaphors and imagery flow! Absolutely gorgeous! Thank you for writing and for sharing this one! And must i remind you, you are a featherless angel for many too! CONGRATULATIONS on winning! Well deserved!
Date: 10/31/2023 4:37:00 AM
Sadly the children are so often the innocent victims. I love the following lines...'When there is nothing but silence, a child gifts his seat on the throne of forgiveness - because he is not a composition of parental chromosomes'. So right you are. Good luck in the contest, I'm sure it will rate very high...Hugs
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Date: 10/30/2023 6:26:00 PM
Beautiful and distinctive portrayal of the fatherless, kelli
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Date: 10/30/2023 6:02:00 PM
A journey of healing for you, no doubt. This was amazing and beautiful.
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Date: 10/29/2023 10:53:00 AM
An excellent write S1 on the fatherless or motherless. My heart goes out to those who had no positive guidance in their life. Well written. love phyl
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Date: 10/29/2023 7:57:00 AM
Your "Featherless Angels" is a wonderful story/write. I Love It... Love your line, "The fatherless are like angels without feathers." Guess that could also go for mothers. Have a very blessed day..............
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Date: 10/28/2023 6:09:00 PM
oH S O, I always become speechless when I read your wounds, mind hugs xo
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Date: 10/28/2023 3:45:00 PM
Your evocative poem is so touching and splendidly written, Silent One. It's wonderful when children don't follow in the footsteps of errant fathers. Best wishes for the contest. :)
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Date: 10/28/2023 1:16:00 PM
what a powerful poem, Silent One!! You evoked so many emotions of an abandoned child--a child who needs his father. Yet the father, so caught up in his own narcissistic demise seems to be clueless. The child is strong and works to be what his father was not. A noble enterprise. This verse was my favorite: In misconception and misunderstanding, the misunderstood leave without a goodbye....forever. The sadness personally resonated with me. Best wishes with the contest. Masterfully done! Sara
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Date: 10/28/2023 11:54:00 AM
Dear Silent One, your poem had a deep emotional impact on me. As it highlights the need to provide youth with positive role models. The poem reflects on memories and the necessity for divine intervention. It also demonstrates that by studying the past, we may improve ourselves in the present. Best wishes for the contest. This is a favor for it's beauty.
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Date: 10/28/2023 11:44:00 AM
A heartfelt dialogue of emotions reflecting on the past--we all need the guidance and blessings of angels--as you so brilliantly illustrate, SO. Yes, we gain light, learning from our past.
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Date: 10/28/2023 11:12:00 AM
Such a deeply moving poem.. definitely missed reading your work Silent One.. that ending, "Everything he is today, is inspired by not mirroring sins of his father's past" these verses left a very powerful positive impression. Long live your pen.. amen!!
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Date: 10/28/2023 8:23:00 AM
A very poignant write S.O that really tugged at my heart strings! Positive role models so very necessary for children ….Debx
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Date: 10/28/2023 10:15:00 AM
Thank you Deb.

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