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Poetic Form: Personification
Inspired: 2024 March 20
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Father and Sun, Again

When the door's open, like a lady in waiting I tip my hat as she beamingly frets.
As I glimpse into the way she brings, the breath of Spring fills my very being.
I go to explore what she has in store, brazenly shone blooms, 'tis I to pluck 'um? 
Away I stepped, said, "None of that, it's me-neighbor's, tho' does owe favors."
So I waltz away with my boutonnière, glide gleaming, and kept on dreaming,
Of time to be, in eternity, with a son I adore, went to war and saw no more.
I realized that darkness befell my eyes, a Sun over here had now disappeared,
People are saying it's a solar eclipse and that the Sun no longer can glimpse ...
Like my son, Sun too is gone, but Sun will be back, thank God for that.
Sun owes me a day of days, do hope that Sun doesn't keep her father waiting.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Kauffman Avatar
April 16, 2024 at 10:14 AM
Aloha, William! We have missed your delightful, poetic spirit like the sun you so wonderfully personify. Not only does the sun shine in this poem but your grief makes a poignant appearance in the last lines of the poem. This lovely write operates on so many levels of joy, of sorrow and of faith! And I love the feminine image of the sun as life giver constantly "birthing" the seasons along with your reference to the solar eclipse that takes the light from the world like the lose of your son. Marvelous work, William. Congratulations! Mahalo!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
April 17, 2024 at 11:40 AM
Sam, like conch shells that constant waves leisurely dot our shorelines so that they may pleasure our receptive ears in passing of them. Thanks for your generous kind thoughts, per the soupmail, the fires on Maui have caused a vanguard of Hawaiians with property from the unsavory, and my constant slipped/sleeps via doctors/court/banks, placed a stranglehold on my funds, slow recovery still--voice activator/nurse corrects typos. Got the address, when good to go, I'll send my estate to you/LOL
Goldsmith Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 9:57 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a beautiful yet sad write. I love It... Great Picture... So sorry about your son. Have a blessed day writing away...........
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
April 7, 2024 at 10:10 AM
Heartfelt, thanks, Paula, I appreciate you, and have a blessed day of days. Aloha, William
Kitchin Avatar
April 5, 2024 at 4:51 PM
William, a creative personification and emotive poem, congratulations on your winning placement.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
April 5, 2024 at 9:03 PM
I appreciate your extended thoughts, Tania, thank you. Aloha, William
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