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Fate

Together we sat under the rain As it poured and soaked our hair We laughed a lot until we cried And cried until we laughed again Memories long forgotten Have arrived yet one more time Destroying sadness in our hearts That was built by lonely crime But deep inside we both knew That one of us had to go For fate had been awaiting And that we both know But what would be me And what would be her If one of us wasn't there So we decided... Fate would drag us both to it!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 12/1/2012 9:46:00 PM
Another awesome write!!!!
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Date: 10/22/2012 7:55:00 AM
SO ENJOYED READING YOUR CREATIVE WRITE HABZY WITH FRAGILE IMAGERY LUV .. WELCOME TO PS ..PLEASE CONTINUE TO SHARE WRDS WITH LUV .. THANKXX FOR SWEET COMMENT ON MY POETRY.
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Date: 10/21/2012 9:06:00 AM
It needs more work..Together we sat under the rain... obvious if you stand in the rain .. you would get wet.. (not dry) and you have a lot of force rhyme... rewrite this one...... sorry! good try.....though
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Habzy Nub
Date: 10/21/2012 11:36:00 AM
Thank you for your advice I shall try my best to fix it.;D
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Annie Lander
Date: 10/21/2012 9:09:00 AM
Definition Poetry which holds the principles and ideals of beauty that are characteristic of Greek and Roman art, architecture, and literature. Example Eloisa to Abelard by Alexander Pope In these deep solitudes and awful cells, Where heav'nly-pensive contemplation dwells, And ever-musing melancholy reigns; What means this tumult in a vestal's veins? Why rove my thoughts beyond this last retreat? Why feels my heart its long-forgotten heat?

Book: Reflection on the Important Things