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Fake FJ helmet with battlefield damage

Fatality of a Promise

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my notions float with sinuous breaths
tumbling upon creased pillows
while early dawn traces the nearing
crossroad between flawless noon
and inked twilight... yes, soon,
he will arrive granting me this balm
of solace, that which barren cycles
have untangled spousal harmony through
fractures and blood of a battlefield...

but destiny is not perfect, not when 
letters  take shape of a raven's beak
screeching  this morning about fatality:
how incisive is the thorn of disclosure,
aching from a thwarted pact as 
mornings of life will now stop rotating, 
wheeling, unfolding in a pace where
I honor his dignity...without  twilights,
without me.

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The Promise Contest for Silent One
6/3/2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Mishra Avatar
June 6, 2020 at 1:14 PM
This brought such a sad end braced with maturity. Your words reflected beauty, sadness and hope as they came towards the pain. Congratulations on your win Nette :)
One Avatar
June 6, 2020 at 7:31 AM
You captured the fatal sadness of this situation.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Messina Avatar
June 4, 2020 at 6:02 AM
Awesome write, Nette. No need to wish you luck, I'm sure this will do well in SO's contest. Hope all is well... Hugs Charlie
Leffanta Avatar
June 3, 2020 at 2:04 PM
The captcha code is "HUM" as in same old story, but you have quite eloquently caught a glimpse of the fact that gods are never as good as their word! well done! Aloha! Rico
Sharp Avatar
June 3, 2020 at 11:54 AM
Outstanding work of art, Nette, great poem.
Rose  Avatar
June 3, 2020 at 11:26 AM
Out of all the promises done, the promises kept are the most valuable of all, I hope your keeping well dear friend, I've missed you too. Not much time for poetry these days, we lost our mother in law yesterday to covid, she was 92. I'm glad she is in heaven where she belongs, Love and hugs to you, always xo
Warrior Avatar
June 3, 2020 at 8:36 AM
Great entry my friend...top-notch form nette...love & hugs...^WW^ :o)
Pandit Avatar
June 2, 2020 at 5:39 PM
Harmony of life sometimes doesn't have a happy ending. Well written, as always, Nette.
Cunningham Avatar
June 2, 2020 at 5:06 PM
A very deep and dark emotive verse Nette, I'm sure S. O will like this one. Tom
Kendrick Avatar
June 2, 2020 at 4:20 PM
Creative way to go with this one for the contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Sara
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